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Tinfoil Symphonies

Tinfoil Symphonies upon the waves
Beyond the eager prow,
That reaches for them, strives for them,
But will never touch them now.

Yonder the muted horizon shines
With freckles that are ships,
Landmass is a memory
Among the clouds in wisps.

The prow strives on, reaching hard,
Obeying its Master’s word.
Tinfoil laughs and shakes her head;
Freer than a bird.

Symphonies shine and symphonies glow
Upon the stricken waves,
That gleam and glimmer in the light
Of Tinfoil’s laughing “heys!”

Nothing but the glistening waves,
And eager, reaching prow.
That will never in a lifetime reach
The Tinfoil Symphonies now.




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LoudDreamerThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Dec. 11, 2011 at 7:26 am:

Holy cow, this is amazing! I love this! I think that tinfoil was the perfect metaphor for water. This is absolutly uniqe, I was smiling the whole time I was reading this. Gread job, five stars!

 

I'd really like to ask you to read something called 'Lonely Fires', but it isn't up yet. Do you think you could check out either 'The Swimmer' or 'I Had A Dream' and comment, please? I'd love to see what you think of them.

 
IceFox416This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Dec. 11, 2011 at 8:37 am :
Sure! It may take me a day or 2 to get around to it, as I'm really busy, but I'll definately do it. :)
 
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LifesIllusion said...
Nov. 25, 2011 at 1:20 pm:
I love this! It is so inceredibly full of detail and description. I feel like i am there with you looking at the ocean! amazing!!!
 
AnimaCordis replied...
Nov. 27, 2011 at 5:34 am :
This is really good, i think the picture you choose was near perfect!
 
TheAustinator replied...
Jan. 22, 2012 at 5:06 pm :
This is awesome! It put's a picture in my mind like I was there seeing what you saw at the time you wrote this.
 
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