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The Fear

Cold fingers wrap
And continue to tap
On the inside of your soul.
Cold bands tighten
And continue to frighten
They won’t release you from their hold.
Shrill voices scream
And break into dreams
They say that you’ve been told;
Still it doesn’t seem
As life continues to team
That fear itself can be so cold.



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FlaviusJacobiusOssummuss said...
Dec. 5, 2011 at 2:25 pm:
Yeah, 250 views! 5 stars, and now 22 comments.  This is one of my most popular pieces.  Thanks to all who read, commented and rated! :)
 
InvisibleLittleTwirp replied...
Dec. 5, 2011 at 2:44 pm :
does that include me?  just wondering.....and trying to comment...is this a comment?  sounds more like a debate going on in my head.......
 
Lord-Flavius-Jacobius-Ossummuss replied...
Dec. 6, 2011 at 11:39 am :
Yeah, this counts as a comment, and it includes you. Lol, thanks. :)
 
InvisibleLittleTwirp replied...
Dec. 6, 2011 at 11:41 am :
did you notice that I changed my screen name to what you called me once?  haha  i think it would be a funny nickname for me, and people who don't know what it's all about would get confused, like a lot of the people reading this.
 
Lord-Flavius-Jacobius-Ossummuss replied...
Dec. 6, 2011 at 6:52 pm :
Yeah.......
 
Tiggerlily14 replied...
Dec. 6, 2011 at 7:00 pm :
if you didn't notice, I'm a chatter box tonight.....  :P
 
Lord-Flavius-Jacobius-Ossummuss replied...
Dec. 6, 2011 at 7:02 pm :
Mhm, I gues that's ok, because I need more comments.
 
Tiggerlily14 replied...
Dec. 6, 2011 at 7:03 pm :
haha  :P  why don't you just get on email and chat?  I'm bored.....(and i might call you, jkjk)
 
Lord-Flavius-Jacobius-Ossummuss replied...
Dec. 6, 2011 at 7:05 pm :
I need to get off the computer, I'm emailing you that powerpoint you wanted.
 
Tiggerlily14 replied...
Dec. 6, 2011 at 7:07 pm :
oh....ok, got the power point  :)  thanx
 
Lord-Flavius-Jacobius-Ossummuss replied...
Dec. 6, 2011 at 7:10 pm :
Yep, talk to you tomorrow. :)
 
Tiggerlily14 replied...
Dec. 6, 2011 at 7:16 pm :
oh great, the busiest day of the week for me, two classes, church, and other school.  oh well. I'll find time, I always do find time to get away from school  :P  ttyl  :)
 
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PrincessBubblegum said...
Nov. 29, 2011 at 4:45 pm:
You're a good rhymer, I like it.
 
FlaviusJacobiusOssummuss replied...
Nov. 29, 2011 at 4:47 pm :
Thanks.  A lot of people seem to think that...
 
lol xD replied...
Nov. 29, 2011 at 5:50 pm :
that's because it's true  o.O
 
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FlaviusJacobiusOssummuss said...
Nov. 28, 2011 at 5:34 pm:
100 views, thanks everyone. :)
 
haha...lol....ROFL replied...
Nov. 28, 2011 at 8:30 pm :

uhm...

du ist sehr welkommen  =)

 
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rainbowbutterflyThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Nov. 28, 2011 at 5:21 pm:
this is amzing :)
 
FlaviusJacobiusOssummuss replied...
Nov. 28, 2011 at 5:30 pm :
Thanks, it's some of my best.
 
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AnimaCordis said...
Nov. 16, 2011 at 1:44 am:

I really like this, it is as you say 'Short and sweet' you really are very good at rhyming.  As a point of improvemet I'd slightly change your opening, it's a little comfusing. On the other hand it's quite mysterious.

For the future you might try 'iambic pentameter' or 'black verse' ie the beats that Shakespare uses within his work, this might give your work an interesting rhythem. 

 
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