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seven

November 8, 2011
By sng1993 SILVER, Los Osos, California
sng1993 SILVER, Los Osos, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Whether or not you write well, write bravely."


I thought I was your daffodil, petals of sunshine, a mist of dew, you told me I was beautiful.

Instead I am your dandelion, blown away without a thought, a passing wind, poof, I’m gone.

The author's comments:
I wrote this in one minute during my english class. Everyone else read what they wrote out loud (and it was all meaningless stuff) but I didn't because I wrote this about the boy I was dating at that time. He was in my class.

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kobie1kenobi said...
on Nov. 14 2011 at 9:20 am
This puts everything in a new light. It holds deep emotion and meaning and it certaintly makes you put things into perspective. Thank you for this peom, it has helped me view the world just a little bit differently.

bubbles.. said...
on Nov. 14 2011 at 6:47 am
bubbles.., Warren, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
Dont forget the bad. learn from it.

i love this its like your a very fluent writer. this is definiatly amazing

:D


dbdaze said...
on Nov. 13 2011 at 8:16 pm
The fact that you wrote this in one minute reflects how strongly your emotions were at that time.  Your metaphors were "spot on".  Nice work!

on Nov. 13 2011 at 11:21 am
clumsyteardropper SILVER, Roslyn, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"You can't help others, if you yourself need help" -my sister ;) love it!

wow. that was very well done :)  it's short, simple, and straight forward... i love it.  amazing job

sng1993 SILVER said...
on Nov. 13 2011 at 10:52 am
sng1993 SILVER, Los Osos, California
9 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Whether or not you write well, write bravely."

I title a lot of my poems in my favorite numbers but that's basically because I can't think of another title!

fdbfdsf said...
on Nov. 13 2011 at 6:32 am
fdbfdsf, Bangalore, Other
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This is really really beautiful, but out of curiosity, why is it titled seven?

on Nov. 12 2011 at 3:25 pm
TubaLady DIAMOND, Athens, Michigan
89 articles 2 photos 49 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I know how it feels to be completely alone and helpless, and the last thing you want to hear in that situation is, 'It's going to be OK. ' The only thing that seems to really help is that someone else who has felt that low expressing those feelings"

That's really pretty. I wrote a free verse titled "Seven", too. :) I haven't submitted it yet, though.