The Friend Wars

November 6, 2011
By Anonymous

One day it all goes well,
another we are aboard battleship.
When you feel as if it's over
the fights are just emerging.

A single remark can cause a wave,
or even a tsunami.
Finally after the storms halt,
the sun starts to glow.

Of course there will be aftershocks,
but they don't cause nearly as much damage.
When you exchange looks,
you try to hold back the tears,
the hardest moment ever.

I look,
they look,
we run towards each other for a hug.

But just until the next time.


The author's comments:
My friends and I used to fight a lot! Writing it all down helped/ Thankfully we have all gotten past the need to fight constantly. Hope you enjoy it!

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on Dec. 17 2011 at 6:55 pm
PepperMint101 BRONZE, Austin, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Life is short. Eat dessert first.

Nice(: Very relatable!

on Nov. 30 2011 at 3:43 pm
--LoveHappens--, Fairfield, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
"A friend is someone who knows you, but loves you anyway"

I really liked this! It was very relatable and well written! Great Job

on Nov. 26 2011 at 10:02 pm
applesauceHater SILVER, Nikolaevsk, Alaska
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oooh. you just know what one of my friendships are. we're good again but thats friends. thats ur poem!!!!really awesome!Awesome analogy(i think thats what its meant for) or possible similies(grammer and stuff werent my fav school work).

on Nov. 26 2011 at 6:28 pm
LifesIllusion BRONZE, Cicero, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't let your fears slow you down. Instead, chase them down and beat them."

Thanks:) you are a great writer too!

on Nov. 26 2011 at 11:42 am
Signed_DK SILVER, Declo, Idaho
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Favorite Quote:
There is no line between genius and insanity, I erased it.

Violence isn't the answer, it's the solution.

I've only heard really good people go into so much detail and explination in a poem. I love it. <3

5/5


on Nov. 25 2011 at 7:11 pm
LifesIllusion BRONZE, Cicero, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't let your fears slow you down. Instead, chase them down and beat them."

Thanks for the advice. I totally agree with you too. :)

on Nov. 25 2011 at 7:10 pm
LifesIllusion BRONZE, Cicero, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't let your fears slow you down. Instead, chase them down and beat them."

Thanks. I never thought of it that way. I'll definitly remember that when I publish the revised version. Thanks again:)

on Nov. 25 2011 at 6:28 pm
CarrieAnn13 GOLD, Goodsoil, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"I love deadlines. I like the whooshing sound they make as they fly by." --Douglas Adams

"The object of life is not to be on the side of the majority, but to escape finding oneself in the ranks of the insane." --Marcus Aurelius

Wonderful poem!  I can definitely relate this to some of my friendships.  Anyway, the only thing I don't like about this poem is this:

"Of course there will be aftershocks,
but they don't cause nearly as much damage." 

It just kind of clanks.  Maybe you could do what AnimaCordis suggested and take out the 'of course.'

Other than that, excellent job!


on Nov. 25 2011 at 4:19 pm
AnimaCordis GOLD, London, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Evil is when the good do nothing"

I quite liked this poem 

The only thing I disliked was two lines in the middle, 'of course there will be aftershocks, but they don't cuase much damage' I understand this could be a metaphore for someone's shockc at 'a single remark' but I think you could loose the 'of course' 

That's just a suggetstion


on Nov. 25 2011 at 2:10 pm
LifesIllusion BRONZE, Cicero, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't let your fears slow you down. Instead, chase them down and beat them."

Please comment on how i can make it better! If you do, i will check out one your pieces too!


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