Winter This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

March 17, 2008
Walking after school
I am struck by the shape of this branch against the bleak sky
shockingly stark and
gray and unrepentant;
Stabbing upwards
so violently – as some knife into a pillow
a sudden rip, and feathers rain down like cloud.
The moment stretches, taut –
(unexpected eternity on a sunless afternoon)
– snapped
as I smile and remember how to breathe

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

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TheRaven said...
Oct. 24, 2010 at 9:53 pm
Outstanding imagery.
miss.snw said...
Sept. 9, 2010 at 9:06 pm
Very Nice Job. Love it
countrygirl said...
Aug. 30, 2010 at 8:56 pm
it is amzing how you can take something as simple as that and make it into such beautiful imagry
aml1000 said...
Jun. 28, 2010 at 9:56 am
This poem is fab, so descriptive and the idea is incredible
kms777 said...
Jun. 8, 2010 at 5:19 pm
wow to be able to put that kinda moment into words is incredible. it reminds me of all the times ive stared off and suddenly snapped back. i hope you'll read some of mine and tell me what to wrok on so i can write more like you.
summer-baby said...
Mar. 8, 2010 at 11:47 am
this is so adorable!! What were youthinking when you wrote this?
***3Lli3*** said...
Feb. 16, 2010 at 2:53 pm
i love this.!!! Check out some of my work i hope u like it.! :) Please comment on my poems i would love to have any tips of any sort.. Check out my newest and latest ones :)
PoetLaureate07 said...
Feb. 15, 2010 at 9:42 am
I dont get it.... help
simplyalone said...
Jan. 19, 2010 at 9:03 pm
sungirl109 said...
Dec. 15, 2009 at 5:36 pm
well its okay
Lanae said...
Nov. 15, 2009 at 12:07 pm
great job!!! =)
Poet_in_Motion This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 12, 2009 at 6:34 pm
I totally disagree with Redemption because this is a really, really fabulous poem and the imagery is great. And anyways, it's free-verse, so the lines can be of any length (that's why I love free-verse the best; so much freedom!). I think the flow is great and it paints a perfect picture in my mind.
bamboom212 said...
Nov. 1, 2009 at 9:06 pm
i also disagree with Redemption. The poem does flow and it's really good. One of the best I've read in a long while.
tigeress3 said...
Jun. 3, 2009 at 10:06 pm
Very inspired, loved the pillow metaphor!
BloodshotMoon said...
Mar. 31, 2009 at 10:01 pm
Wow, this is, I don't know what to say or what to rank it so i put okay because it stuned me at the way it effects the reader. I mean wow, great job. I would like to see more of your work. It is really nice.
~I Luv Tigers~ said...
Mar. 17, 2009 at 11:44 pm
I liked it but i dont quit understand it if i did i think it would be a really good poam
Cora W. said...
Mar. 6, 2009 at 3:12 pm
Your imagery is absolutely stunning! The knife in the pillow painted a perfect picture in my mind! Keep it up!
yael K. said...
Feb. 17, 2009 at 1:23 am
GlobieRSquash said...
Feb. 15, 2009 at 1:56 am
I disagree with Redemption65 this peice does flow. It all depends on how you read it. Very nice job!
Paige said...
Dec. 27, 2008 at 8:05 pm
Truly stunning! One of the best poems I've seen on the site!
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