Winter This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

March 17, 2008
Walking after school
I am struck by the shape of this branch against the bleak sky
shockingly stark and
gray and unrepentant;
Stabbing upwards
so violently – as some knife into a pillow
a sudden rip, and feathers rain down like cloud.
The moment stretches, taut –
(unexpected eternity on a sunless afternoon)
– snapped
as I smile and remember how to breathe

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

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jamiraaa said...
Oct. 24, 2016 at 10:21 am
sadesdd said...
Oct. 5, 2012 at 1:22 pm
Word choice is amazing.
Ollieanne said...
Aug. 6, 2012 at 1:13 pm
Very well written, I absolutely love winter, and this piece captures the feeling of winter beautifully:)
Missundrstoodx2 said...
May 10, 2012 at 2:03 am
Your powerfully charged words evoke such strong emotion - a rare talent, great work.
AgentOrange789 said...
Mar. 5, 2012 at 9:08 am

Wow, I love it! Very interesting and unique. It really captures the feeling of winter in my opinion.

Could you guys read some of my poems? Preferably "A Poem from Planet Mars" and "Upon the Banks of the Nile." Thanks.

Fia-fia said...
Feb. 4, 2012 at 10:28 pm
very interesting! i don't completely understand but i like it. seems to have almost a double meaning. THank you! :)
Natasha1994 said...
Nov. 10, 2011 at 1:15 pm
i think you to work on it alittle more but its ok poem to me
BeachBum101 said...
Sept. 23, 2011 at 7:45 pm
This is great! Could you ceck out my work "Where are you" and "Left to die"? Would love some feed back :]
star2brite This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 3, 2011 at 9:40 pm
Beautifully simple and elegant.
reblep said...
May 16, 2011 at 4:02 pm
i love how something so little can cause someone to write a poem as great as this. 
Aderes18 said...
May 2, 2011 at 6:33 pm
Reminds me of my private moments when I just sit by myself on the bus. 
slichwala1 said...
Apr. 6, 2011 at 12:00 pm
this poems imagery reminds me of the cold gray winters and how people want it to be over
LIL(E) CHERRY said...
Apr. 6, 2011 at 9:09 am
summermarrie said...
Apr. 2, 2011 at 7:43 am
i really like this one love the way you discribed evry thing
JJSchneider said...
Mar. 22, 2011 at 7:22 pm
Can you look at my poems? I've spent a lot of time recently writing them but near no one has viewed them besides myself.
Hope U. said...
Jan. 28, 2011 at 4:34 pm
wow that is the best poem i have ever read
LoveAndWar said...
Jan. 16, 2011 at 1:52 am
perfect. absolutely wonderful. it's so... familiar. I'm sure we've all done it... but you capture it so well. :) nicely done!
Stacey said...
Dec. 27, 2010 at 9:25 am
This piece is really great.
JLET309 said...
Dec. 13, 2010 at 10:39 am
This poem has many detailed words. Everything that was said had a nice detail to describe it. I like how you describe what the branch looked like exactly. I could picture it in my head, and I liked how you described it to something I can relate with. My favorite line is, "As I smile and remember how to breathe."
amirdaron93 said...
Nov. 11, 2010 at 9:32 am
Good Job! I  could really image whaty was going on!
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