Cambio Network
Magazine, website & books written by teens since 1989

Winter This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

By
Walking after school
I am struck by the shape of this branch against the bleak sky
shockingly stark and
gray and unrepentant;
Stabbing upwards
so violently – as some knife into a pillow
a sudden rip, and feathers rain down like cloud.
The moment stretches, taut –
(unexpected eternity on a sunless afternoon)
– snapped
as I smile and remember how to breathe

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.




You might be interested in this content from TeenSpot:


Join the Discussion


This article has 42 comments. Post your own!

Report abuse
Missundrstoodx2This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
May 10 at 2:03 am:
Your powerfully charged words evoke such strong emotion - a rare talent, great work.
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Report abuse
AgentOrange789This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Mar. 5 at 9:08 am:

Wow, I love it! Very interesting and unique. It really captures the feeling of winter in my opinion.

Could you guys read some of my poems? Preferably "A Poem from Planet Mars" and "Upon the Banks of the Nile." Thanks.

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Report abuse
Fia-fiaThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Feb. 4 at 10:28 pm:
very interesting! i don't completely understand but i like it. seems to have almost a double meaning. THank you! :)
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Report abuse
Natasha1994 said...
Nov. 10, 2011 at 1:15 pm:
i think you to work on it alittle more but its ok poem to me
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Report abuse
BeachBum101This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Sept. 23, 2011 at 7:45 pm:
This is great! Could you ceck out my work "Where are you" and "Left to die"? Would love some feed back :]
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Report abuse
star2briteThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 3, 2011 at 9:40 pm:
Beautifully simple and elegant.
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Report abuse
reblep said...
May 16, 2011 at 4:02 pm:
i love how something so little can cause someone to write a poem as great as this. 
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Report abuse
Aderes18This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
May 2, 2011 at 6:33 pm:
Reminds me of my private moments when I just sit by myself on the bus. 
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Report abuse
slichwala1 said...
Apr. 6, 2011 at 12:00 pm:
this poems imagery reminds me of the cold gray winters and how people want it to be over
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Report abuse
LIL(E) CHERRY said...
Apr. 6, 2011 at 9:09 am:
THIS IS REAL NICE HOPE U MAKE MORE ANYWAYS I LOVE MY BABY OSCAR 4 EVER 8/26/2010
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Report abuse
summermarrie said...
Apr. 2, 2011 at 7:43 am:
i really like this one love the way you discribed evry thing
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Report abuse
JJSchneider said...
Mar. 22, 2011 at 7:22 pm:
Can you look at my poems? I've spent a lot of time recently writing them but near no one has viewed them besides myself.
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Report abuse
Hope U. said...
Jan. 28, 2011 at 4:34 pm:
wow that is the best poem i have ever read
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Report abuse
LoveAndWar said...
Jan. 16, 2011 at 1:52 am:
perfect. absolutely wonderful. it's so... familiar. I'm sure we've all done it... but you capture it so well. :) nicely done!
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Report abuse
Stacey said...
Dec. 27, 2010 at 9:25 am:
This piece is really great.
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Report abuse
JLET309 said...
Dec. 13, 2010 at 10:39 am:
This poem has many detailed words. Everything that was said had a nice detail to describe it. I like how you describe what the branch looked like exactly. I could picture it in my head, and I liked how you described it to something I can relate with. My favorite line is, "As I smile and remember how to breathe."
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Report abuse
amirdaron93 said...
Nov. 11, 2010 at 9:32 am:
Good Job! I  could really image whaty was going on!
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Report abuse
TheRaven said...
Oct. 24, 2010 at 9:53 pm:
Outstanding imagery.
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Report abuse
miss.snw said...
Sept. 9, 2010 at 9:06 pm:
Very Nice Job. Love it
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Report abuse
countrygirl said...
Aug. 30, 2010 at 8:56 pm:
it is amzing how you can take something as simple as that and make it into such beautiful imagry
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Report abuse
aml1000 said...
Jun. 28, 2010 at 9:56 am:
This poem is fab, so descriptive and the idea is incredible
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Report abuse
kms777 said...
Jun. 8, 2010 at 5:19 pm:
wow to be able to put that kinda moment into words is incredible. it reminds me of all the times ive stared off and suddenly snapped back. i hope you'll read some of mine and tell me what to wrok on so i can write more like you.
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Report abuse
summer-baby said...
Mar. 8, 2010 at 11:47 am:
this is so adorable!! What were youthinking when you wrote this?
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Report abuse
***3Lli3*** said...
Feb. 16, 2010 at 2:53 pm:
i love this.!!! Check out some of my work i hope u like it.! :) Please comment on my poems i would love to have any tips of any sort.. Check out my newest and latest ones :)
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Report abuse
PoetLaureate07 said...
Feb. 15, 2010 at 9:42 am:
I dont get it.... help
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Report abuse
simplyalone said...
Jan. 19, 2010 at 9:03 pm:
beautiful...
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Report abuse
sungirl109 said...
Dec. 15, 2009 at 5:36 pm:
well its okay
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Report abuse
Lanae said...
Nov. 15, 2009 at 12:07 pm:
great job!!! =)
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Report abuse
Poet_in_Motion This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 12, 2009 at 6:34 pm:
I totally disagree with Redemption because this is a really, really fabulous poem and the imagery is great. And anyways, it's free-verse, so the lines can be of any length (that's why I love free-verse the best; so much freedom!). I think the flow is great and it paints a perfect picture in my mind.
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Report abuse
bamboom212 said...
Nov. 1, 2009 at 9:06 pm:
i also disagree with Redemption. The poem does flow and it's really good. One of the best I've read in a long while.
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Report abuse
tigeress3 said...
Jun. 3, 2009 at 10:06 pm:
Very inspired, loved the pillow metaphor!
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Report abuse
BloodshotMoon said...
Mar. 31, 2009 at 10:01 pm:
Wow, this is, I don't know what to say or what to rank it so i put okay because it stuned me at the way it effects the reader. I mean wow, great job. I would like to see more of your work. It is really nice.
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Report abuse
~I Luv Tigers~ said...
Mar. 17, 2009 at 11:44 pm:
I liked it but i dont quit understand it if i did i think it would be a really good poam
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Report abuse
Cora W. said...
Mar. 6, 2009 at 3:12 pm:
Your imagery is absolutely stunning! The knife in the pillow painted a perfect picture in my mind! Keep it up!
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Report abuse
yael K. said...
Feb. 17, 2009 at 1:23 am:
okay
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Report abuse
GlobieRSquash said...
Feb. 15, 2009 at 1:56 am:
I disagree with Redemption65 this peice does flow. It all depends on how you read it. Very nice job!
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Report abuse
Paige said...
Dec. 27, 2008 at 8:05 pm:
Truly stunning! One of the best poems I've seen on the site!
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Report abuse
Redemption65 said...
Dec. 9, 2008 at 9:21 pm:
Ummm....the poem did not flow. Writing was meant to flow from sentence to sentence and the words should mold together to form a perfect sculpture. But I am deeply apologetic because your poem lost all respect because of its jagged wording. The poem is adequate. You need flow.
 
creziimimi replied...
Feb. 8, 2010 at 1:00 pm :
Yeah, I see what your saying, I kinda agree, but I do believe it's a very good poem, I mean I like it, but I see what your saying, and I respect it, becasue I kinda agree. No offence to the author, but yeah, I like it, but Redemtion, your right.
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Report abuse
spdyblitzdiana13 said...
Oct. 30, 2008 at 6:06 pm:
this is a great poem!
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Report abuse
JonathanDR said...
Oct. 22, 2008 at 6:59 pm:
This is great. I love the phrase in parentheses, set off by the dash. The image of the feathers is wonderful. Please keep writing!
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Report abuse
juicii j said...
Oct. 8, 2008 at 4:04 pm:
i think it is very good.....it was very interesting and it had a very powerful inteclect.I really appreciated
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment