When You Wish Upon A Star, Nothing Happens.

October 22, 2011
By SophieG. SILVER, St. Davids, Pennsylvania
SophieG. SILVER, St. Davids, Pennsylvania
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You grabbed the scissors made for your left hand and cut me out of your
life. You surgically removed me so well because you are a doctor.
You took a leaf out of your favorite book and drove a stake
through my heart. When you were little, you wanted to
be a street mime, so you won’t talk as practice.
You broke my heart with your beat-up
baseball bat autographed by Ryan
Howard. You’re always the
one to take out the trash
which is why you
dumped
me.


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Riley79 BRONZE said...
on Jan. 18 2012 at 9:51 pm
Riley79 BRONZE, Dover, Delaware
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Favorite Quote:
“Music in the soul can be heard by the universe.”
-Lao Tzu

I love the title!

on Dec. 7 2011 at 1:45 am
youngspeare BRONZE, Nairobi, Other
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Favorite Quote:
We wouldn't ask a rose that grew from the concrete for having damaged petals; in turn we'd all celebrate its tenacity, we'd all love tz will to reach the sun well we are the roses n these are my damaged petals don't ask me why thank God and ask me how

great work! Keep it up! 
Check out my poem "Ghosts of the Past" and rate/comment? Would really appreciate it!

on Dec. 6 2011 at 7:08 pm
shapeshifter56 GOLD, Cave Creek, Arizona
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Favorite Quote:
"Instead of waiting for the storm to pass, learn to dance in the rain."
--Unknown Author

I. Love. This! Great! I can't even verbalize why I like it so much! All I know is that I do!

on Nov. 14 2011 at 3:24 pm
rainbowgirl BRONZE, Ijamsville, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
My work has been modified to fit your brains. :)

oh....

well the title defenatly worked, i love your writing


on Nov. 13 2011 at 1:12 pm
clumsyteardropper SILVER, Roslyn, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"You can't help others, if you yourself need help" -my sister ;) love it!

as said in the other comment i left for you... you've got a gift!!! :)  i know you've only been a member for, like, a little over a month... but keep posting stuff!  great job! :)

on Nov. 13 2011 at 1:01 pm
SophieG. SILVER, St. Davids, Pennsylvania
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the idea was she's wishing for them to get back together, but it didn't happen. But yeah, it's not that clear, i just wanted to have an interesting title that would make people want to read it :)

on Nov. 13 2011 at 10:58 am
rainbowgirl BRONZE, Ijamsville, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
My work has been modified to fit your brains. :)

I like it, it makes sence, but I don't really get the title...

on Nov. 10 2011 at 8:48 am
AmayaSakaruta, Borger, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
From out of the night that covers me, black as the pit from pole to pole, i thank whatever gods may be, for my unconquerable soul. -William Earnest Henley
Though I walk through the valley of the shadow of death, I shall fear no evil. -the Bible

this is good :D its cool how you made it getting smaller and how u were so descriptive i can really tell how you feel. (punctuation fail.)

feedback on some of my work please?


FULLSTOP GOLD said...
on Nov. 8 2011 at 4:37 am
FULLSTOP GOLD, Skipton, North Yorkshire, Other
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Favorite Quote:
forever and ever and ever and ever will never be enough

i really like it and i completely agree

on Nov. 6 2011 at 6:39 pm
StarlitSunrise DIAMOND, Clemmons, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"Blessed are they who see beautiful things in humble places where other people see nothing." ~Camille Pissarro

This is really really great! I love the shaping of the words, it really creates a feel of decline. It was so simple, yet said so much at the same time. Definitely keep writing, you have talent :)

on Nov. 3 2011 at 8:23 pm
book.junkie GOLD, Kingston, Other
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impossible... but it isnt...... no its impossible.... but then i suppose your the first person to actually make it true. you captured the torment of realtionships in life and being dumped. its like you placed every sarcastic or murphy's law about love in your poem. simply.left.speechless. congrats. i've. read. many. poems. but. only. few. like. yours. can. capture. reality. :) ;) ur very smart about th topic like you've suffered heartbreak. might i ask what inspired you to write this poem. also i would really appreciate it if you please view my poems


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