Broken Barbie Doll

October 22, 2011
Toss back your blond hair,
Over your shoulder.
Gaze into his eyes,
Now let your long lashes flutter.
Laugh at his dumb joke,
Put a hand on his arm.
Taking him is easy,
You’ve got natural charms.
I’ve got to study,
Sit back and observe.
You’ve got it so easy,
My goodbye goes unheard.
Because you could have anyone,
And yet you want him.
Is it because I was the first one,
To say hi to the kid?
Because I might have a shot,
With this kid maybe,
If I try really hard,
He just might see me.
But your star shines so brightly,
And mine is so weak.
Just a hue of a rainbow,
Once at its peak.
Now it has faded,
The sky has turned back to blue.
One day I will resurface,
And I will overtake you.
Right now it’s not possible,
And I blink back tears.
Head to the gate,
I’m almost there.
When he jumps up,
Leaves you to your own.
Wraps an arm around me,
And then takes me home.
I look behind me,
Observe you standing there.
A broken Barbie doll,
You’ve got frizz in your hair.
And your star seems to dim,
While mine seems to glow.
His hand slips into mine,
And that’s how I know.
That you’re no longer here,
In his thoughts,
You are long gone,
And I’m all he’s got.
I start to tremble,
Then begin to shake,
Because for the first time in a long time,
I’m not in second place.

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JohnW said...
Nov. 6, 2011 at 6:23 pm
I like this, so many girls will do anything like a "Barbie Doll" just to get what they want.
FashionGuru said...
Nov. 6, 2011 at 12:00 am
I loved this! I think it's so true in so many peoples lives, where they his behind the shadow of another instead of taking a risk and being on their own. Fantasic, seriously. And thanks for the comment!
Lola_Black said...
Nov. 5, 2011 at 2:07 pm
Sweet! And yes, I think we've all been there. Only, the person I like doesn't come running over to hold my hand. Not that lucky : ( So, I really like how it has a happy ending!
mynameisgrace This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 4, 2011 at 3:27 pm

this is amazing! you're really talented! i hope to read more of your work!

-thanks for the comment on my poem (:

KaylahMarie said...
Nov. 3, 2011 at 2:36 pm
Everytime I read this, I love it more and more each time. This is purely amazing. I completely understand where it comes from, because theres the same kindof thing always happening between me and my friend. I love the speed of it, and the way you described things. It's my alltime FAVORITE poem. Keep it up. (:
jruth said...
Nov. 3, 2011 at 2:33 pm
Great Poem! I can definitely relate, but sometimes we need to stop, look in the mirror, and love who we are :) Keep writing! Oh and check out my work, if ya want :) 
emmacloe26 said...
Nov. 3, 2011 at 10:33 am
Very interesting and Very true, I love it! :)
jshawts said...
Nov. 1, 2011 at 3:25 pm
I love this!! It's really fast paced and the rhyme works really well. I totally can relate to you as well. Great poem! :)
bubbles.. replied...
Nov. 3, 2011 at 7:34 am
this is sooo true! its got emotion and i can relate in a way. your a great writer:)
KCayla said...
Nov. 1, 2011 at 6:15 am
wow. I really like this. I'm always in second place while my friend is in first but i put that behind me because i dont have to compete against her to find love cause i already did and that's the only thing besides english that excel in 
SanamSheriff said...
Nov. 1, 2011 at 1:52 am
is really really good. The title itself draws you in, and you tell a whole story in such a short amount of time, and you still have all the rhymes, rhythm and releaase. well done. Do you mind checking out some of my work and telling me what you think and rating it? thankss Th
Risible said...
Oct. 31, 2011 at 10:12 pm
I really enjoyed this! I could see it happening and I like the comparison + good use of rhyme. Could you check out my poem Forever and let me know what you think? I'd love your feedback :) 
purpleink said...
Oct. 31, 2011 at 12:14 pm
i really like this! and yes, it does seem we all go there.
horsewriter4evr said...
Oct. 30, 2011 at 10:30 pm
Love the theme of Broken Barbie doll!
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