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It's true I'm strong only on the surface not all the way through and you regret m e because I'm not perfect but neither are you. Let's face the truth we are on The path of self destruction  with nobody to stop   
ourselves except each other I have hope for the both of us. I'd give anything to save you, maybe if I'm lucky you'd do the same for me... We're waisting away not a single oz of trust not a single oz of love. I'll be the first to admit I miss you more than you'll ever know, honestly I love you 





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GingerRunner said...
May 14, 2012 at 11:54 am
I'm in the same boat right now... well sorta. Nice peice. 
 
Angeleyes12 said...
Jan. 16, 2012 at 10:07 am
I liked thia one, two things though... 1. Oz=ounce right? I suggest spelling out your words instead of abbreviating them so there is no confusion 2. I suggest putting in commas, it stands at a pause point for the reader so its not continuous and run on feeling Work on your formatting. You have good ideas though for writing ! Keep it up!
 
Chibi-Alexis said...
Nov. 15, 2011 at 7:44 am
This is really good!
 
maizyiscrazy said...
Nov. 11, 2011 at 4:55 pm

Okay, you said honest opinion. Here we go!

I think that you you need to paragraph, even if you meant it to be that way, it just makes everything clearer.

Good writing, I like it.

 

Keep going!!

 

 
swifthearth replied...
Nov. 22, 2011 at 12:15 pm
The formatting was the bigest flaw.
 
ShadowKeeper said...
Nov. 9, 2011 at 5:38 pm

Your poem sums up life. I love it 

 

 
Dreamer replied...
Nov. 9, 2011 at 5:43 pm
Thanks so much :)
 
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