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In my head you're always there,
I walk around hoping to feel your stare.
But you're never there, you never have been.
Don't you care?
You're a mystery, you're a ghost. Come out, come out.
You're my dad, you are part of me.
How am i to be?
You're supposed to love me, and protect me from bad.
Its like a game of hide and Seek,
I have to search; i hope you don't cheat.
You're not here, You're not there.
Come out if you care.




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Malia said...
May 24, 2012 at 2:42 pm:
In response to your comment to read your poem: I really love your rhyming, and as the person below said, hwo you concealed who you are talking about.
 
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IMAdreamerThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 6, 2012 at 7:29 pm:
I like the concealment of who u r talking about in the beginning, and then the surprise of who your talking about. Well written, nice job!
 
illusions replied...
Apr. 11, 2012 at 8:44 am :
Thank you so much
 
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Devils.Angel said...
Mar. 16, 2012 at 2:33 pm:
I like how at the begining it feels likie your talking about your like ex-boy friend and then at the end your talking about your dad. i like how you care about him and then your dad really doesnt seem to care about you.
 
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illusions said...
Feb. 22, 2012 at 3:17 pm:
thank you all for your comments
 
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PoetryAngel14 said...
Feb. 16, 2012 at 9:52 pm:
I can sort of relate to it. Very deep and emotional. I, too, can feel the speaker's confusion. Great work :D
 
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SmartTart said...
Dec. 23, 2011 at 11:09 am:
I like it . I can relate to it 2. Made me think.
 
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BlackPhoenix said...
Dec. 20, 2011 at 3:25 pm:
i like the braking rhyme sceme, when you hit the words that do rhyme it makes them ring in you head, quite moving 
 
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SpringMoon98 said...
Dec. 20, 2011 at 3:03 pm:
I like the rhymes and I think this is a nice poem
 
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illusions said...
Dec. 5, 2011 at 2:24 pm:
Thank you so much
 
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ReadWriteBreatheThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Dec. 2, 2011 at 6:53 pm:
I love this. I can really relate to it and I can feel the emotion you put into it. Great job.
 
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Goddess said...
Dec. 2, 2011 at 4:54 pm:
such a beautiful poem. i feel alot of emotions from it
 
illusions replied...
Dec. 5, 2011 at 2:23 pm :
wow thanxz
 
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petleavitt said...
Nov. 16, 2011 at 2:21 pm:
thank you!!!!!!!!
 
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Risible said...
Nov. 5, 2011 at 3:15 pm:
I feel your confusion and dillusionment--very nice. :) 
 
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inkblot13 said...
Nov. 3, 2011 at 1:47 pm:
This is amazing, the feeling you put in the poem is incredible! Good job
 
petleavitt replied...
Nov. 4, 2011 at 2:23 pm :
Thank you soooooo much!!!! 
 
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