Come out

October 17, 2011
By illusions GOLD, I Dontg Even Like This Town, Other
illusions GOLD, I Dontg Even Like This Town, Other
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In my head you're always there,
I walk around hoping to feel your stare.
But you're never there, you never have been.
Don't you care?
You're a mystery, you're a ghost. Come out, come out.
You're my dad, you are part of me.
How am i to be?
You're supposed to love me, and protect me from bad.
Its like a game of hide and Seek,
I have to search; i hope you don't cheat.
You're not here, You're not there.
Come out if you care.



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Malia BRONZE said...
on May. 24 2012 at 2:42 pm
Malia BRONZE, Birmingham, Other
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In response to your comment to read your poem: I really love your rhyming, and as the person below said, hwo you concealed who you are talking about.

illusions GOLD said...
on Apr. 11 2012 at 8:44 am
illusions GOLD, I Dontg Even Like This Town, Other
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Thank you so much

on Apr. 6 2012 at 7:29 pm
Shahiro PLATINUM, Johnston, Iowa
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Favorite Quote:
"Soon we must all choose between what is right and what is easy." - Dumbledore (Goblet of Fire)

I like the concealment of who u r talking about in the beginning, and then the surprise of who your talking about. Well written, nice job!

on Mar. 16 2012 at 2:33 pm
Devils.Angel GOLD, Drumheller, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"all good ppl die young"
"a lawful kiss is never worth a stolen one"

I like how at the begining it feels likie your talking about your like ex-boy friend and then at the end your talking about your dad. i like how you care about him and then your dad really doesnt seem to care about you.

illusions GOLD said...
on Feb. 22 2012 at 3:17 pm
illusions GOLD, I Dontg Even Like This Town, Other
10 articles 0 photos 150 comments
thank you all for your comments

on Feb. 16 2012 at 9:52 pm
PoetryAngel14 PLATINUM, Ithaca, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Dare to be imperfect and one day there will tug at your sleeve a soulmate." ~Robert Brault
"Life is like riding a bicycle - in order to keep your balance, you must keep moving." ~Albert Einstein

I can sort of relate to it. Very deep and emotional. I, too, can feel the speaker's confusion. Great work :D

on Dec. 23 2011 at 11:09 am
SmartTart SILVER, Beth;ehem, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
Stand for what you believe in even if it means you stand alone.

I like it . I can relate to it 2. Made me think.

on Dec. 20 2011 at 3:25 pm
BlackPhoenix GOLD, North Bennington, Vermont
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i like the braking rhyme sceme, when you hit the words that do rhyme it makes them ring in you head, quite moving 

on Dec. 20 2011 at 3:03 pm
SpringMoon98 GOLD, Ava, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Everyone wants to change the world, but do they ever stop to think about changing themselves?"
Leo Tolstoy

I like the rhymes and I think this is a nice poem

illusions GOLD said...
on Dec. 5 2011 at 2:24 pm
illusions GOLD, I Dontg Even Like This Town, Other
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Thank you so much

illusions GOLD said...
on Dec. 5 2011 at 2:23 pm
illusions GOLD, I Dontg Even Like This Town, Other
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wow thanxz

on Dec. 2 2011 at 6:53 pm
ReadWriteBreathe PLATINUM, Pocatello, Idaho
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Favorite Quote:
"You have to consider the possibility that God does not like you" Tyler Durden Fight Club

I love this. I can really relate to it and I can feel the emotion you put into it. Great job.

on Dec. 2 2011 at 4:54 pm
Goddess PLATINUM, Connellsville, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
“Dream as if you'll live forever, live as if you'll die today.”

such a beautiful poem. i feel alot of emotions from it

illusions GOLD said...
on Nov. 16 2011 at 2:21 pm
illusions GOLD, I Dontg Even Like This Town, Other
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thank you!!!!!!!!

Risible SILVER said...
on Nov. 5 2011 at 3:15 pm
Risible SILVER, Norwalk, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
"Sooner or later, those who win are those who think they can." -Richard Bach

I feel your confusion and dillusionment--very nice. :) 

illusions GOLD said...
on Nov. 4 2011 at 2:23 pm
illusions GOLD, I Dontg Even Like This Town, Other
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Thank you soooooo much!!!! 

on Nov. 3 2011 at 1:47 pm
inkblot13 PLATINUM, Auburn, New York
41 articles 1 photo 162 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If I knew where poems came from, I'd go there"




- Michael Langley, 'Staying Alive'

This is amazing, the feeling you put in the poem is incredible! Good job


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