Your Loving Words

October 18, 2011
Your loving words,
Coated with care and the scent of sincerity
Are empty beneath their attractive packaging.
Hiding under a thick layer of make-up
Resides the most hideous face
You enter through the door
And lungs become absent of air
Holding back breath with unspoken prayers
That by some miracle the corners of your lips will be upturned
Yet they remain in a permanent frown
A grimace displaying the angry soul that writhes within
Lurking beneath the plastic of your skin
Pushing, tearing, ripping at your hardened exterior
Til’ one final blow releases the demon
And because of these words you’ve said
Tears have shed
Wrists have bled
This lifeless family lies dead
Your poison seeped through like acid
The needle that pierces my heart pulled by a single thread
Hastily fixing my wounds only to have them reopened
Cut at my scars and leave me choking
My desperation for others to admire me is at an all time high
Your lack of love has left my barely beating heart to die
It starves for affection
Overdue for the swell of happiness
I’ve developed a defection
It eats away at my soul, gnawing at my very being
And lathers on a sickly infection
One that causes for a blood-curling scream to escape my vocal chords
Every time I see my reflection
The hatred towards myself growing like a fungus in my brain
Every cruelty your lips have spoken banging inside my head
My spastic acts of anger portraying me to be insane
Tied down forever by your chains
All because of your loving words.
Those empty promises that left me deranged.

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Love.Hate.Passion. said...
Dec. 29, 2011 at 7:16 pm
Hey , yeah? this was AMAZING. Your use of eloquent wording and wonderful rhythmic flow is something to desire. Great job! *****
PaigeStreet This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Dec. 11, 2011 at 3:47 am
You have such a great use of alliteration, and a beatifully subtle, very sparse use of rhyme here. I like that.
blitsnik said...
Dec. 10, 2011 at 10:10 am
really well written. i love the words you use, a lot of people dont know words like writhe or griace, which is sad. great job.
SwallowedByInsanity This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Dec. 10, 2011 at 12:11 pm
it's depressing when I see poems with great ideas behind them, but such a low use of vocabulary :( so thanks, i take pride in using the words unused
applesauceHater said...
Dec. 9, 2011 at 3:32 pm
i super surprised that this has no comments:)but i think its cuz no one can find the most amazing words to describe this!its so eerie yet so beautiful:)and the way you use words and twist it into poetry is astounding. ive been trying to work at tha for a while:)anywho5/5
SwallowedByInsanity This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Dec. 9, 2011 at 9:11 pm

Thank you! and yeah lol, it's so hard to get your work noticed :c

But every once in a while i come on here and post in the forums requesting feedback.

anywho, thank you and good luck with ur writing (:

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