Your Loving Words

October 18, 2011
By SwallowedByInsanity PLATINUM, Hillsdale, New Jersey
SwallowedByInsanity PLATINUM, Hillsdale, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"Love is a poison, but it is also the antidote."


Your loving words,
Coated with care and the scent of sincerity
Are empty beneath their attractive packaging.
Hiding under a thick layer of make-up
Resides the most hideous face
You enter through the door
And lungs become absent of air
Holding back breath with unspoken prayers
That by some miracle the corners of your lips will be upturned
Yet they remain in a permanent frown
A grimace displaying the angry soul that writhes within
Lurking beneath the plastic of your skin
Pushing, tearing, ripping at your hardened exterior
Til’ one final blow releases the demon
And because of these words you’ve said
Tears have shed
Wrists have bled
This lifeless family lies dead
Your poison seeped through like acid
The needle that pierces my heart pulled by a single thread
Hastily fixing my wounds only to have them reopened
Cut at my scars and leave me choking
My desperation for others to admire me is at an all time high
Your lack of love has left my barely beating heart to die
It starves for affection
Overdue for the swell of happiness
I’ve developed a defection
It eats away at my soul, gnawing at my very being
And lathers on a sickly infection
One that causes for a blood-curling scream to escape my vocal chords
Every time I see my reflection
The hatred towards myself growing like a fungus in my brain
Every cruelty your lips have spoken banging inside my head
My spastic acts of anger portraying me to be insane
Tied down forever by your chains
All because of your loving words.
Those empty promises that left me deranged.


The author's comments:
Something I conjured up straight from the heart in a time of desperation.

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on Dec. 29 2011 at 7:16 pm
Love.Hate.Passion., Spring Valley, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
~Hope. Faith. Love~
~Be proud of who you are.You are all unique in a different way.~
~I WILL NOT fade into oblivion , and become less than
a distant memory.~

Hey , yeah? this was AMAZING. Your use of eloquent wording and wonderful rhythmic flow is something to desire. Great job! *****

on Dec. 11 2011 at 3:47 am
PaigeStreet PLATINUM, Juneau, Alaska
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Favorite Quote:
"Stay golden"
- Johnny (The Outsiders, S. E. Hinton)

You have such a great use of alliteration, and a beatifully subtle, very sparse use of rhyme here. I like that.

on Dec. 10 2011 at 12:11 pm
SwallowedByInsanity PLATINUM, Hillsdale, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"Love is a poison, but it is also the antidote."

it's depressing when I see poems with great ideas behind them, but such a low use of vocabulary :( so thanks, i take pride in using the words unused

on Dec. 10 2011 at 10:10 am
blitsnik SILVER, Palm Bay, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"If you must mount the gallows, give a coin to the headman, a jest to the crowd, and meet the drop with a smile on your lips."

really well written. i love the words you use, a lot of people dont know words like writhe or griace, which is sad. great job.

on Dec. 9 2011 at 9:11 pm
SwallowedByInsanity PLATINUM, Hillsdale, New Jersey
22 articles 0 photos 44 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love is a poison, but it is also the antidote."

Thank you! and yeah lol, it's so hard to get your work noticed :c

But every once in a while i come on here and post in the forums requesting feedback.

anywho, thank you and good luck with ur writing (:


on Dec. 9 2011 at 3:32 pm
applesauceHater SILVER, Nikolaevsk, Alaska
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i super surprised that this has no comments:)but i think its cuz no one can find the most amazing words to describe this!its so eerie yet so beautiful:)and the way you use words and twist it into poetry is astounding. ive been trying to work at tha for a while:)anywho5/5


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