Perfection and Faults

October 19, 2011
By HayWay GOLD, Draper, Utah
HayWay GOLD, Draper, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
FOUR SQUARE!!!!!! :)


She is perfect.
Beautiful, proud, happy, complete
She hasn’t wasted one moment.
When the sun crawls, sleepily,
Away from the sky
She hasn’t missed one word
On her list
She’s strong, unbreakable.
Her brick wall is sturdier
Than a tree
It cannot be destroyed
By hateful comments and words.

She was me.

Her wall was crumbling
Under the pressure
Spiteful words carved into her mind
Like hieroglyphics on a cave wall
She’s weak, shattered into to
Pieces
The sun leaps over the mountains.
And she’s wasted her time
Waiting for the storm to pass
Incomplete, depressed, ashamed, ugly.
She’s broken beyond repair
She is me.


The author's comments:
hope you like my attempt at poetry....

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HayWay GOLD said...
on Nov. 8 2011 at 9:42 pm
HayWay GOLD, Draper, Utah
10 articles 0 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
FOUR SQUARE!!!!!! :)

Thank you so much! :D it really means a lot that people like my writing :D

on Nov. 6 2011 at 9:12 pm
Lizzie Hamilton BRONZE, Hinsdale, Illinois
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:)   Welcome! It's really amazing! You should write more poetry!Oh, and I also liked your other piece Snow Flakes!

HayWay GOLD said...
on Nov. 5 2011 at 6:19 pm
HayWay GOLD, Draper, Utah
10 articles 0 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
FOUR SQUARE!!!!!! :)

Thank you so much! Its fine I'm glad it was even read ^-^

on Nov. 1 2011 at 9:54 pm
Lizzie Hamilton BRONZE, Hinsdale, Illinois
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I really enjoyed this poem.. it says a lot about how stress can affect your life. 

Oh, by the way, I meant to rate it 5 stars, but I accidentally clicked 4! Sorry!





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