Alive

October 18, 2011
By ReadWriteBreathe PLATINUM, Pocatello, Idaho
ReadWriteBreathe PLATINUM, Pocatello, Idaho
24 articles 4 photos 114 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You have to consider the possibility that God does not like you" Tyler Durden Fight Club


I awake in a cold sweat.
Putting on my shoes, I have a goal set.
Cold air bites my unclothed arms.
Weaving on my bike through unlit farms.
Making my way to the metal bridge.
Looking down over the mountainous ridge.
Surprisingly, you're face comes into my mind.
I see all you're features but your voice I can't find.
I take a step closer to the rumbling sea.
Soon with you, I will be.
You took your life now I'll take mine.
If you don't want me to just give me a sign.
A light in the distance, could it be?
A sign from you trying to save me?
A boy steps out of the car and walks toward the edge.
"You're not thinking of jumping off of the ledge?"
I stand silent and stare at his face.
He has to hear my heart start to race.
A single tear falls down my cheek.
I don't want solitude, It's love I seek.
I hug that boy just as I would've hugged you.
You're dead now but it doesn't have to be the same for me too.


The author's comments:
I've been reading a lot of stories on Teen Ink about girls losing their boyfriend's and I got inspired to write this.

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VeronicaAnn. said...
on Dec. 30 2011 at 6:07 pm
VeronicaAnn., Brunswick, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"Tell Me When You Feel My Silence." -Possibility ~ Lykke Li

&& View* Sorry For The Typo.

VeronicaAnn. said...
on Dec. 30 2011 at 6:06 pm
VeronicaAnn., Brunswick, Ohio
0 articles 5 photos 26 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Tell Me When You Feel My Silence." -Possibility ~ Lykke Li

This Is Obviously Very Easy To Relate To For Many People, Including Me..! I Love It! Keep Up The Good Work && I'd Love To Read A View More Pieces Of Your Work! :D

on Dec. 4 2011 at 9:42 am
PhoenixCrossing GOLD, Tinley Park, Illinois
14 articles 0 photos 179 comments
Really powerful i loved it. Cept "you're" should be "your" . Keep writing :)

on Nov. 14 2011 at 5:58 pm
ReadWriteBreathe PLATINUM, Pocatello, Idaho
24 articles 4 photos 114 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You have to consider the possibility that God does not like you" Tyler Durden Fight Club

Thank you :)

Bambi67 SILVER said...
on Nov. 13 2011 at 10:20 pm
Bambi67 SILVER, Chicago, Illinois
9 articles 1 photo 58 comments

Favorite Quote:
remember that the future comes one day at a time.
Dean Acheson

Very nice,keep writing.

on Nov. 8 2011 at 5:46 pm
ReadWriteBreathe PLATINUM, Pocatello, Idaho
24 articles 4 photos 114 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You have to consider the possibility that God does not like you" Tyler Durden Fight Club

Thank you so much

on Nov. 6 2011 at 10:11 pm
TouchOfARose SILVER, Winter Garden, Florida
7 articles 1 photo 118 comments

Favorite Quote:
"We all have ability. The difference is how we use it." -Stevie Wonder

This was great! Keep up writing. (:

on Nov. 5 2011 at 2:15 pm
ShyWriting42 BRONZE, Mesquite, Texas
3 articles 0 photos 41 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Our deepest fear is not that we are inadequate. Our deepest fear is that we are powerful beyond measure...We ask ourselves, Who am I to be brilliant, gorgeous, talented, fabulous? Actually, who are you not to be? You are a child of God."

That was an excellent read. Great imagery and emotional appeal, Keep writing!

on Nov. 4 2011 at 3:04 pm
ReadWriteBreathe PLATINUM, Pocatello, Idaho
24 articles 4 photos 114 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You have to consider the possibility that God does not like you" Tyler Durden Fight Club

Thank you :)

on Nov. 4 2011 at 2:12 pm
NadimAzar BRONZE, Beirut,
1 article 0 photos 10 comments
wow...this is magnificent...keep it up :)

on Oct. 29 2011 at 7:52 pm
ReadWriteBreathe PLATINUM, Pocatello, Idaho
24 articles 4 photos 114 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You have to consider the possibility that God does not like you" Tyler Durden Fight Club

Thank you :)

HayWay GOLD said...
on Oct. 28 2011 at 10:19 pm
HayWay GOLD, Draper, Utah
10 articles 0 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
FOUR SQUARE!!!!!! :)

this is amazing! i absolutely love it! keep writing :]

on Oct. 28 2011 at 6:39 pm
TaylorBreanne PLATINUM, Sandston, Virginia
24 articles 0 photos 40 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I write to escape reality. I write to be free. I write because I can lie or tell the truth. I write because I love it. I write because...that's the real me. I am a writer..." -TaylorBreanne

I LOVE this! Wow. I'm crying. This is just amazing.


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