On a Summer's Day

October 17, 2011
By s-money BRONZE, Johnstown, Pennsylvania
s-money BRONZE, Johnstown, Pennsylvania
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On a summer’s day,
The wind whistles
Freely singing its song.
Atop the waves
While they danced,
For many hours long.

On a summer’s day,
The sun strokes the earth,
Immersed in crystalline sky,
While the clouds float
In a still trance
Without saying goodbye.

The author's comments:
This was the first poem I ever wrote. I wrote it for a school project a few years ago and I ended up discovering my passion for writing.Enjoy:)

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on Oct. 21 2011 at 4:52 pm
VandalSpirit DIAMOND, Pleasant Prairie, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
Yet this I call to mind and therefore I have hope: Because of Gods great love, we are not consumed. His compassion never fail. They are new every morning; great is your faithfulness.

Nice poem! I liked image you created in my mind. :) Keep writing!

Little.Miss said...
on Oct. 21 2011 at 3:50 pm
Cute poem. Good grammar, too!

on Oct. 21 2011 at 3:18 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"

This was beautiful, though one line is in the wrong tense, I think you're writing in the present tense, but "while they danced" is in the past tense. Other than that, I found the imagery powerful, and the flow very flow-y ;) Great work, keep it up, my dear, may your passion for writing take you far.

s-money BRONZE said...
on Oct. 21 2011 at 9:19 am
s-money BRONZE, Johnstown, Pennsylvania
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sakina GOLD said...
on Oct. 20 2011 at 11:32 am
sakina GOLD, Chennai, Other
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Favorite Quote:
A negative thinker See's a difficulty in every opportunity but a positive thinker sees an opportunity in every difficulty. So always think positive and u'll surely B successful in LIFE.
-Hazrat Ali (A.S)

wow..! this is a really very well written poem... And I liked the last para alot...:) Good luck writing

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