On a Summer's Day

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On a summer’s day,
The wind whistles
Freely singing its song.
Atop the waves
While they danced,
For many hours long.

On a summer’s day,
The sun strokes the earth,
Immersed in crystalline sky,
While the clouds float
In a still trance
Without saying goodbye.





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Little.Miss said...
Oct. 21, 2011 at 3:50 pm
Cute poem. Good grammar, too!
 
IamtheshyStargirl said...
Oct. 21, 2011 at 3:18 pm
This was beautiful, though one line is in the wrong tense, I think you're writing in the present tense, but "while they danced" is in the past tense. Other than that, I found the imagery powerful, and the flow very flow-y ;) Great work, keep it up, my dear, may your passion for writing take you far.
 
sakina said...
Oct. 20, 2011 at 11:32 am
wow..! this is a really very well written poem... And I liked the last para alot...:) Good luck writing
 
s-money replied...
Oct. 21, 2011 at 9:19 am
thanks   
 
Taphephobia This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Oct. 21, 2011 at 4:52 pm
Nice poem! I liked image you created in my mind. :) Keep writing!
 
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