On a Summer's Day

October 17, 2011
By s-money BRONZE, Johnstown, Pennsylvania
s-money BRONZE, Johnstown, Pennsylvania
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On a summer’s day,
The wind whistles
Freely singing its song.
Atop the waves
While they danced,
For many hours long.

On a summer’s day,
The sun strokes the earth,
Immersed in crystalline sky,
While the clouds float
In a still trance
Without saying goodbye.

The author's comments:
This was the first poem I ever wrote. I wrote it for a school project a few years ago and I ended up discovering my passion for writing.Enjoy:)

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on Oct. 21 2011 at 4:52 pm
VandalSpirit DIAMOND, Pleasant Prairie, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
Yet this I call to mind and therefore I have hope: Because of Gods great love, we are not consumed. His compassion never fail. They are new every morning; great is your faithfulness.

Nice poem! I liked image you created in my mind. :) Keep writing!

Little.Miss said...
on Oct. 21 2011 at 3:50 pm
Cute poem. Good grammar, too!

on Oct. 21 2011 at 3:18 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

This was beautiful, though one line is in the wrong tense, I think you're writing in the present tense, but "while they danced" is in the past tense. Other than that, I found the imagery powerful, and the flow very flow-y ;) Great work, keep it up, my dear, may your passion for writing take you far.

s-money BRONZE said...
on Oct. 21 2011 at 9:19 am
s-money BRONZE, Johnstown, Pennsylvania
3 articles 0 photos 1 comment
thanks   

sakina GOLD said...
on Oct. 20 2011 at 11:32 am
sakina GOLD, Chennai, Other
18 articles 13 photos 173 comments

Favorite Quote:
A negative thinker See's a difficulty in every opportunity but a positive thinker sees an opportunity in every difficulty. So always think positive and u'll surely B successful in LIFE.
-Hazrat Ali (A.S)

wow..! this is a really very well written poem... And I liked the last para alot...:) Good luck writing




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