October 11, 2011
By Greenpaw BRONZE, Billerica, Massachusetts
Greenpaw BRONZE, Billerica, Massachusetts
3 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Drawing outside the lines
The picture is undefined
With a flick of the wrist
The image is lost in an abyss

Moments are in my grasp
Unknown time elapsed
Crumbled paper balls form a mountain
Like water bursting from a fountain

In front of me is a self-portrait
I swear this drawing is my poorest
Can I have a second attempt
To twist your hateful contempt?

Whispers are heard in the wind
Was your depiction of me destine?
I'll just wait for the rain
To wash away this picture's stains

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so_joy SILVER said...
on Sep. 27 2012 at 8:39 pm
so_joy SILVER, Navesink, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"Be the change you want to see."

Wow! Very unique and special. Great job! Please read, rate, and comment on my poems! Thanks!

Lexie96 GOLD said...
on Nov. 7 2011 at 6:03 am
Lexie96 GOLD, Havana, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
Now Cinderella don't you go to sleep, it's such a bitter form of refuge, oh don't you know the kingdom's under siege, and everbody needs you. - The Killers

Oh, I love it. Especially the end about washing away the pictures stains. It kind of reminds me of The Portrait of Dorian Gray, but without all the selfishness :)

Check out my stuff sometime?

on Nov. 4 2011 at 8:46 am
AmayaSakaruta, Borger, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
From out of the night that covers me, black as the pit from pole to pole, i thank whatever gods may be, for my unconquerable soul. -William Earnest Henley
Though I walk through the valley of the shadow of death, I shall fear no evil. -the Bible

i dont quite understand everything in this but ur not really supposed to are you? i really like this tho...

could u pleez give some feedback on my work? thanx

on Nov. 1 2011 at 9:33 am
aurorairis SILVER, Darien, Connecticut
6 articles 0 photos 27 comments

Beautiful! Great word choice and rhyming! I love the last two lines because they are so powerful! Nice job!

Your wrtiting reminds me somewhat of my own! Could you comment on my work please?

on Oct. 24 2011 at 5:28 pm
marzipan SILVER, PA, Pennsylvania
5 articles 4 photos 8 comments

Really good ;)! I like that you don't rhyme things with what one would easily rhyme them with. Your word choice is great! There's just something about this poem that is really interesting! Good job and keep up the good work!



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