October 11, 2011
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Drawing outside the lines
The picture is undefined
With a flick of the wrist
The image is lost in an abyss

Moments are in my grasp
Unknown time elapsed
Crumbled paper balls form a mountain
Like water bursting from a fountain

In front of me is a self-portrait
I swear this drawing is my poorest
Can I have a second attempt
To twist your hateful contempt?

Whispers are heard in the wind
Was your depiction of me destine?
I'll just wait for the rain
To wash away this picture's stains

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so_joy said...
Sept. 27, 2012 at 8:39 pm
Wow! Very unique and special. Great job! Please read, rate, and comment on my poems! Thanks!
Lexie96 said...
Nov. 7, 2011 at 6:03 am

Oh, I love it. Especially the end about washing away the pictures stains. It kind of reminds me of The Portrait of Dorian Gray, but without all the selfishness :)

Check out my stuff sometime?

AmayaSakaruta said...
Nov. 4, 2011 at 8:46 am

i dont quite understand everything in this but ur not really supposed to are you? i really like this tho...

could u pleez give some feedback on my work? thanx

aurorairis said...
Nov. 1, 2011 at 9:33 am

Beautiful! Great word choice and rhyming! I love the last two lines because they are so powerful! Nice job!

Your wrtiting reminds me somewhat of my own! Could you comment on my work please?

marzipan said...
Oct. 24, 2011 at 5:28 pm

Really good ;)! I like that you don't rhyme things with what one would easily rhyme them with. Your word choice is great! There's just something about this poem that is really interesting! Good job and keep up the good work!


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