Thoughts on Life From A Teenage Atlas MAG

October 5, 2011
By Gwgideon GOLD, Commerce Twp, Michigan
Gwgideon GOLD, Commerce Twp, Michigan
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I feel like Atlas
Holding the sky up
Protecting everyone under it
When never getting any rewards or rest myself

As everyone eats and parties
I'm stuck here
Doing the hardest work in the world
While everybody else prospers off my suffering

And even as I protect everyone
People still make fun of me
They punch me
And I can't punch back because I'm too busy protecting them

People say my muscles are strengthening
But what's the point of building your muscles
When all you are going to use them for
Is holding up the sky?

My old friends have tried to help me hold the sky up
But once they realize that I won't ever be able to play games with them again
They spit on me
And walk away, leaving me with my burden once more

Alone I stand here
Day after day
Night after night
Imagining what my life would be like if I wasn't stuck here

But what is the point
Of dreaming about things that will never be?
Dreaming about pleasure and happiness
While I'm stuck in a swamp of depression and pain

So here I am, rambling on
Praying and begging Aeolus for a gust of wind
So that my overheated, sweaty body
Can be cooled off for a few seconds



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on May. 25 2017 at 1:46 pm
AmberKat9999 BRONZE, New Bedford , Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
Peace and Confidence/ Jeremiah 29:11

This really was an amazing piece. I could connect with you were saying. Please keep writing. You have a way of engaging with the readers.

CammyS SILVER said...
on Dec. 3 2012 at 4:52 pm
CammyS SILVER, Papillion, Nebraska
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Favorite Quote:
No passion in the world is equal to the passion to alter someone else's draft.
H. G. Wells
Don't say the old lady screamed. Bring her on and let her scream.
Mark Twain

I can totally connect with what you're saying! This piece is amazing and totallly deserves to be in the magazine. The mood was constant throughout the entire story and that is very hard to do, especialy in poetry! I love it!

on Aug. 28 2012 at 12:28 pm
GummyBearQueen2 SILVER, Johannesburg, Other
8 articles 3 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everything will be okay in the end. If it's not okay, it's not the end"- I'm not sure, so I'm going to say anonymous.

  Wow... I cannot express how much awe is emanating from me right now. You are one of the best writers that I have ever encoutered!  You completely immerse the reader in what you say. Please, do the world a favour and keep writing! I know at least one person who is subscribing to you... :D  

on Aug. 27 2012 at 2:44 pm
remember16 SILVER, WhiteLake, Michigan
9 articles 0 photos 44 comments

Favorite Quote:
This is only a minor setback to a major comeback

this is so amazing!   

on Aug. 16 2012 at 4:42 pm
writer3499 GOLD, New Bedford, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 196 comments

Favorite Quote:
"it's impossible to live without failing at something, unless you live so cautiously that you might has well not have lived at all-in which case you fail by default."
-J.K.Rowling

Wow this is seriously amazing! I loved how you kept the mood the whole peice....it felt likeI can feel how depressed you are.  Fantastic job! If you get the chance, would you mind checking out some of my work? Thanks!

on Aug. 6 2012 at 11:20 am
WebDave123 BRONZE, Boston, Massachusetts
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Test comment.

on Aug. 3 2012 at 9:41 am
thatclarinetgirl12 BRONZE, Point Pleasant, West Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"everybody is a genius, but if you judge a fish on its ability to climb a tree, it will spend its whole life believing it's stupid."-Albert Einstein

i love this! i saw atlas as i read it. keep writting

 


irishlass317 said...
on Aug. 2 2012 at 5:18 pm
irishlass317, Jefferson City, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"I asked Jesus 'How much do you love me?' He answered 'This much.' And He streched out His arms and died."

This is soooooo amazing!!! I love it and can totally relate!!! :D Great job!!!! :)

on Jul. 30 2012 at 4:11 pm
poetic.eyes PLATINUM, Everson, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
eARTh

Wow! This poem is superb. It seems to be filled to the brim with metaphors! Love it!

on Jul. 29 2012 at 4:25 pm
foreverSmall PLATINUM, Brighton, Michigan
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I love this piece. It is well thought out and looks like you put all your emotions into it. That's probably the best way to do it, write a poem. I'd like to read more of your work, great job (: 

on Jul. 25 2012 at 12:56 pm
Shahiro PLATINUM, Johnston, Iowa
20 articles 2 photos 262 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Soon we must all choose between what is right and what is easy." - Dumbledore (Goblet of Fire)

This is cool. I love Greek mythology and I think this is a well written take on what Atlas had to do, what he might have been thinking... Ps. Please check out my work????????

annie.j02 GOLD said...
on Jul. 25 2012 at 11:14 am
annie.j02 GOLD, Elverson, Pennsylvania
12 articles 2 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Imagination is the beginning of creation. You imagine what you desire, you will what you imagine, and at last, you create what you will” – George Bernard Shaw

This is beautiful and creative. Good job

Sail_ BRONZE said...
on Jul. 24 2012 at 1:02 am
Sail_ BRONZE, Eugene, Oregon
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wow, this was really captivating! my eyes were glued to each word and line.. i love the way everything flows! keep writing, and i hope more people see the emotions you put into this piece of work!

on Jul. 15 2012 at 5:55 am
Songs_Along GOLD, Abcd, Other
16 articles 0 photos 66 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Sometimes we are only given a few minutes to be with the one we love and a thousand hours to spend just thinking about them."

nice symbolic poems....i cud relate to it very well..good job :)

on Jul. 9 2012 at 11:21 pm
AllThatJazz BRONZE, Columbus, Ohio
3 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
Lindi: Life isn't about waiting for the storm to pass, it's about learning to dance in the rain
June: Shoot for the moon, even if you miss, you'll land among the stars

I just wanted to express my amazement- I wrote a poem this year called 'Holding Up the Sky' and it's about the same sort of thing. It just goes to show how many people really feel this way, like they're holding the sky up and that their burden is so huge. I'll comment again when I've posted it, but in the meanwhile- WOW. You wrote this beautifully and I am really impressed. I love the message this poem gives out, and I'm hoping to read more of your works in the future.

on Jul. 4 2012 at 7:54 pm
flywiththebirds SILVER, Vancleave, Mississippi
6 articles 0 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
Revenge is sweet, but forgiveness is sweeter.

Revelations 21:23

But what is the ocean but a multitude of drops?

This describes just how I feel sometimes, taking care of everyone else even though they make fun of me.

on Jul. 4 2012 at 7:54 pm
flywiththebirds SILVER, Vancleave, Mississippi
6 articles 0 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
Revenge is sweet, but forgiveness is sweeter.

Revelations 21:23

But what is the ocean but a multitude of drops?

This describes just how I feel sometimes, taking care of everyone else even though they make fun of me.

on Jul. 4 2012 at 7:54 pm
flywiththebirds SILVER, Vancleave, Mississippi
6 articles 0 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
Revenge is sweet, but forgiveness is sweeter.

Revelations 21:23

But what is the ocean but a multitude of drops?

This describes just how I feel sometimes, taking care of everyone else even though they make fun of me.

on Jul. 4 2012 at 2:39 pm
Randomscreennamelalalala PLATINUM, Bonney Lake, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
"Reality is merely an illusion, albeit a very persistent one.
-Albert Einstein

I just want to say thank you for getting it right- Atlas held up the sky, not the Earth. 

on Jul. 3 2012 at 8:51 pm
allaboutmylife PLATINUM, Miami, Florida
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this is so well written and what you're trying to portray does show and i espcially love that you based it on greek mythology


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