Have You Revised This?

October 4, 2011
By PaulMental GOLD, Oshkosh, Wisconsin
PaulMental GOLD, Oshkosh, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
"It's amazing what can be accomplished when no one cares who gets the credit."

I am a bad poem.

I rhyme, sometimes.

It seems awkward, right?

I struggle with a simple

A A A A rhyme style.

I contain no smoothness or elegance;
I lack any idea of alliteration or consonance.
The paper has many cross outs, and you can’t really read the ?????Some lines look like they’ve been mangled
and robbed of all structure,
ad evry wrd spellt rong looses identatee.
I have no meaning.
Similes and metaphors go out the door
and suffer
like literature in a hurricane.
They become tattered and beaten
with their texts clinging
despondently to the trees.

The poor characters that appear on the paper,
as they gasp and beg to be freed
from a blank field laden with deficiencies,
are the only images I want you to
View, to

Was I written for a dim
Or a child
whose miniscule mind can not
comprehend the complex concept
of having feeling or view? No.

I was written for you.

I desperately wring out any morsel
of beauty and grace
from my papyrus veins
to mask my mediocrity.

Perhaps I have performed a ploy,
and all my device hide
behind simple words and
understandable scheme?
The rubric doesn't agree.

I am a bad poem.
So simple
that I don't require you to
Oh the time you've wasted
reading this bad poem.

The author's comments:
I wrote this for my creative writing class when we were assigned to compose a poem describing ourselves. Some of my peers argued that this poem didn't really tell that much about me. I reply by telling them there's much more to it than just the words you're reading.

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