What makes you better than me

October 9, 2011
By AngelsLullaby GOLD, Neverland, Idaho
AngelsLullaby GOLD, Neverland, Idaho
12 articles 7 photos 95 comments

Favorite Quote:
Music is a higher revelation from wisdom and philosophy. ~Ludwig Von Beethoven


What makes you better than me?

I'm not like most girls.

I don't wear make-up

I don't wear name brand clothes

I'm not a size 3 supermodel

I don't believe in destroying ones
self esteem for my own amusement.

Why do I get judged for who I am?

What have I done to be treated so poorly?

I've taken this beating for years and years

But I'm still standing on my feet

Head held high.

Though it does sting me and leave bruises, my heart is not made of paper

Still not understanding why I'm hated so

I will not sink to your level to be liked.

I'm not shallow, selfish or spiteful

I'm caring, helpful and loving.

I refuse to be brought down.


The author's comments:
Inspired by my emotions over the past 6 years of me living in my neighborhood, in school and even my own church.

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Tiwaz SILVER said...
on Jun. 5 2012 at 4:57 pm
Tiwaz SILVER, Jackson, Missouri
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The emotion is strong here, and I'm glad that you feel confident and don't allow others to bring you down. One thing I'd like to say, though (and I'm sure you realize this and didn't intend it this way): Size 3, makeup, and name-brand clothes =/= shallow or mean. A lot of girls (myself included) have been made to feel bad for being small or wearing makeup. Just because these are things that many girls do doesn't mean they're wrong. I've seen too many girls who have been bullied turn around and do the same thing to girls who they percieve as being "most girls" and therefore better off.

 

Anyway, I'll get off my soapbox now. Good job overall (I especially like "my heart is not made of paper")!


butterfly123 said...
on Jun. 4 2012 at 4:02 am
butterfly123, Banglore, Other
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i second that! the poem is so beautiful even if it is so simply stated! ..i do have one tiny suggestion though...in the line 'still not understanding why...' i really think you should replace the 'still not understanding' with ' still don't understand why..' , it sorta improves the flow of the poem. but that is just my opinion. anyway.. ...great work and keep writing :D

on Feb. 23 2012 at 10:40 pm
Behind_a_Plastic_Smile GOLD, Roseville, California
17 articles 1 photo 129 comments

Favorite Quote:
"if you're not 1st you're last"

Yesss!! :) *two thumbs up*

on Jan. 21 2012 at 12:55 pm
snaomi PLATINUM, Cheshire, Connecticut
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I like the passion of the lines and their set up . For the most part, you used punctuation at the ends of the sentences, and I like that - it adds power - so maybe considering adding periods to the rest of the sentences. I think the line "I don't believe in destroying" could be stronger if "ones" were replaced with "other's" or "your". Also the line "I will not sink to your level" might be stronger without "to be liked". But other than that I mad dig :) Thoughts?

on Dec. 4 2011 at 3:27 pm
this is my fav. can definately feel the emotion.

on Oct. 31 2011 at 8:48 pm
milforce SILVER, Bloomington, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
"Those who have the ability to act, have the responsibility to act."

Truer words have never been spoken and I can understand where your coming from. People have made fun of me just because I wear glasses. Stupid, right? But anyway, this is really good and you do a great job of letting your voice be heard. Good word choice too. Keep it up!

on Oct. 23 2011 at 9:15 am
Sarajustine BRONZE, Massapequa, New York
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Wow this is so true! A reader can really connect to this because a lot of people feel the same way. Great job!

on Oct. 13 2011 at 3:50 pm
AngelsLullaby GOLD, Neverland, Idaho
12 articles 7 photos 95 comments

Favorite Quote:
Music is a higher revelation from wisdom and philosophy. ~Ludwig Von Beethoven

Thanks for reading :)

on Oct. 13 2011 at 2:13 pm
AngelsLullaby GOLD, Neverland, Idaho
12 articles 7 photos 95 comments

Favorite Quote:
Music is a higher revelation from wisdom and philosophy. ~Ludwig Von Beethoven

Thanks for the advice :) I'll work on that.

on Oct. 13 2011 at 1:17 pm
ms.nerdalicious GOLD, Orlando, Florida
16 articles 1 photo 74 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A bird doesn't sing because it has an answer, it sings because it has a song."
— Maya Angelou

I loved that poem! It's really sweet, because I know a ton of girls (myself included) who feel that exact same way. Again, I loved it!

on Oct. 12 2011 at 10:29 pm
BrightBurningCampeador PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
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I felt like I was reading the story of my life. The wording of this poem is strong in a good way, but I think the rhythm could use improvement. The way each line is a sentence makes it very much like prose. If that's not what you're going for I'd suggest breaking some of the lines into smaller segments.

BluBliss GOLD said...
on Oct. 12 2011 at 5:38 pm
BluBliss GOLD, New York, New York
14 articles 0 photos 161 comments

Favorite Quote:
Bella's love for Edward was like, "Omg. He's hot. He's mine because he sparkles. Now I'll brood the wholle book while I'm with him."

This is so true. I'm not a size 3 supermodel. i liked that line teh best. :p




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