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Burning Cold

September 29, 2011
By Anonymous

Piercing blizzards that eat hands
Bodies turning blue
Frost bite see the chance to attack
as vision gets struck down.
by a blistering white out

If it were to be painted
this horrid scenery
the canvas would be blank white
for there is NOTHING to be seen
Stuck in a white Blanket
Unable to move
but wanting so desperately to be
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The author's comments:
Wrote it out of the blue.
It just came to me.
Probably because I didn't have winter clothes/gloves/boots one winter. xD

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on Dec. 2 2011 at 8:19 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

This is quite good, however, I rather think some of the wording could do with re-writing. I'm not sure what you're trying to say with "Blizzards that eat hands", and some of your grammer/wording is very confusing. 

All in all, though, this is a very good poem with a lot of potential! Thanks for sharing, never stop writing. 


TapTap SILVER said...
on Dec. 2 2011 at 8:18 pm
TapTap SILVER, New Berlin, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
Dream as if you'll live forever, love like there is no tomorrow, dance like there is no one watching.

i feel like this sometimes, just never thought of a way to express it! really fabulous job, once again im jelous! keep writing!