Miracle

September 12, 2011
By PaigeStreet PLATINUM, Juneau, Alaska
PaigeStreet PLATINUM, Juneau, Alaska
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Favorite Quote:
"Stay golden"
- Johnny (The Outsiders, S. E. Hinton)


don't speak
don't
speak

don't ruin the moment
the momentous fluid opening
the mouth of the horizon
yawning out
fire
life
light
spilling into the pooled shadows,
the corners of darkness,
the dregs of night
and
suddenly

sunrise.
and its day,
for our side of this little planet.


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on Feb. 5 2013 at 12:41 am
PaigeStreet PLATINUM, Juneau, Alaska
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Favorite Quote:
"Stay golden"
- Johnny (The Outsiders, S. E. Hinton)

Thank you so much :)
I don't know about you, but I often yawn when I wake up, lol. 
But thanks for your feedback!

on Nov. 27 2012 at 8:05 pm
TaylorWintry DIAMOND, Carrollton, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Never fear shadows. They simply mean there's a light shining somewhere nearby." - Unknown

WOW. This is fantastic! You took something as small as a sunrise, and wrote beautiful and meaningful lines to accompany it. WOW, this is truly great. My favorite part is how you personify the horizon into a yawning mouth. I find it ironic how you say the horizon is yawning, and it's daybreak. Random, sorry.   Great job, though!!! 5/5

on Mar. 25 2012 at 3:30 pm
PaigeStreet PLATINUM, Juneau, Alaska
47 articles 0 photos 218 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Stay golden"
- Johnny (The Outsiders, S. E. Hinton)

Good points! Thanks!

on Feb. 15 2012 at 7:18 pm
Kiki_McGee GOLD, Woodstock, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
"Hope is the thing with feathers that perches in the soul - and sings the tunes without the words - and never stops at all." - Emily Dickinson

I agree. Other than the small punctuation error, great job! I also really like the line about the "dregs of night."

leafy said...
on Nov. 19 2011 at 9:22 am
leafy, City, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Gil: I would like you to read my novel and get your opinion. 
Ernest Hemingway: I hate it. 
Gil: You haven't even read it yet. 
Ernest Hemingway: If it's bad, I'll hate it. If it's good, then I'll be envious and hate it even more. You don't want the opinion of another writer. 

Lovely. I loved the lines "the corners of darkness/the dregs of night" – great word choice. In the last stanza, second line, do you mean "and it's day," though? If so, I think you should just go ahead and say "and it is day." Overall, another great poem 5/5


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