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Invisible

A 16-year-old girl walks alone in the school halls, sits alone at lunch.
No one sees her no one listens to her, even her own parents.
She wears black all the time.
She loves to draw and loves math, though no one notices.
At home she locks her self in her room
to block out the yelling and screaming.
Her parents stop yelling at each other only to yell at her





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smileyface96 said...
Oct. 18, 2011 at 7:31 pm
Well, Re-wording could be necessary and maybe sprinkle with a few more adjectives to spice it up with some description. Maybe add how the girl feels or how people perceive her behavior? Just some ideas :) Stop by and looks at my poetry sometime? Id love some feed back! Have a good day!
 
MusicFanatic1695 replied...
Oct. 21, 2011 at 9:42 am
Thanks, I apperticat it when some one does not put my work down but helps me inprove it.
 
MusicFanatic1695 replied...
Oct. 21, 2011 at 9:46 am
improve* ( lol i can't spell) :P
 
IMAdreamerThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Apr. 26, 2012 at 3:28 pm
I agree with smiley face! It's is a good poem, a good topic but it needs some editing, revising. Ps. Please check out my work? I love getting comments and feedback. ;D
 
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