Invisible

September 14, 2011
By ArtFanatic1695 SILVER, Wheeler, Texas
ArtFanatic1695 SILVER, Wheeler, Texas
7 articles 3 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Can't is negative so think positive"






Tammye


A 16-year-old girl walks alone in the school halls, sits alone at lunch.
No one sees her no one listens to her, even her own parents.
She wears black all the time.
She loves to draw and loves math, though no one notices.
At home she locks her self in her room
to block out the yelling and screaming.
Her parents stop yelling at each other only to yell at her



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on Apr. 26 2012 at 3:28 pm
Shahiro PLATINUM, Johnston, Iowa
20 articles 2 photos 262 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Soon we must all choose between what is right and what is easy." - Dumbledore (Goblet of Fire)

I agree with smiley face! It's is a good poem, a good topic but it needs some editing, revising. Ps. Please check out my work? I love getting comments and feedback. ;D

on Oct. 21 2011 at 9:46 am
ArtFanatic1695 SILVER, Wheeler, Texas
7 articles 3 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Can't is negative so think positive"






Tammye

improve* ( lol i can't spell) :P

on Oct. 21 2011 at 9:42 am
ArtFanatic1695 SILVER, Wheeler, Texas
7 articles 3 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Can't is negative so think positive"






Tammye

Thanks, I apperticat it when some one does not put my work down but helps me inprove it.

on Oct. 18 2011 at 7:31 pm
smileyface96 BRONZE, Tifton, Georgia
2 articles 0 photos 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To die would be an awfully big adventure" -peter pan

Well, Re-wording could be necessary and maybe sprinkle with a few more adjectives to spice it up with some description. Maybe add how the girl feels or how people perceive her behavior? Just some ideas :) Stop by and looks at my poetry sometime? Id love some feed back! Have a good day!




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