Fairer With Time

September 11, 2011
By austenite77 GOLD, Appleton, Wisconsin
austenite77 GOLD, Appleton, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
Die my dear? Why that's the last thing I'll do


I remember you
From a long time ago
I was just a child
And you were just a girl
I remember the words
That you used to say
With a tear in your eye
And a cry in your soul
The more withered roses
Grow fairer in time
While the withered people
Fly away in the wind
Where the wind carries them
None of us will know
Over the mountains and hills
They escape on their own
That's where I've gone
I've escaped from you
To the valley of roses
That never will wilt
I've been here for years
I never have left
Now you have escaped
To the valley as well
Even somber and grave
Grows joyful in time
So the valley has bloomed
So the people still smile
In the valley of roses
Full of the sad and withered
But still there is sorrow
For never a man grows fairer in time


The author's comments:
This is inadvertantly about the Black Plague, I hope it's not too dark. It's my first poem on this website.

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on Oct. 20 2011 at 9:08 pm
milforce SILVER, Bloomington, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
"Those who have the ability to act, have the responsibility to act."

I'm not gonna lie, this did confuse me a bit. But by no means was it in a bad way. Yes, it confused me but I didn't really care. The piece was still beautiful and I really liked it.

on Oct. 20 2011 at 4:22 am
Garnet77 PLATINUM, Sinagpore, Other
31 articles 6 photos 578 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everything's a triangle." ~ My mother

"Write what you love, write what you care about, because sometimes, it's the easiest way to be heard."

 I think this poem has a very deep meaning beneath your wonderful word choice. I probably had to read it two or three times to get a better understanding of what you're trying to say, and I guess it can relate to the black plague. I feel like it can be interpreted in many ways though. I think the 'you' is someone who has passed away, and the 'valley' is the afterlife. It's just how I saw it, anyway. Your symbolism is amazing. I really like this :)

on Oct. 19 2011 at 8:50 pm
wordjunkie BRONZE, Houston, Texas
1 article 0 photos 105 comments

Favorite Quote:
Those who say it can't be done should not interrupt those who are doing it.

Hmm. I wish it wasn't about the plague, because without the description I got a totally different impression. What I took I can actually relate to alot, and its about getting over sorrow. But I guess everyone sees something different.

Little.Miss said...
on Oct. 19 2011 at 5:05 pm
I agree with SwallowedByInsanity... It was interesting, but I'm a little confused. Maybe if you explained it some, it'd help!

on Oct. 19 2011 at 4:03 pm
SwallowedByInsanity PLATINUM, Hillsdale, New Jersey
22 articles 0 photos 44 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love is a poison, but it is also the antidote."

I found this hard to relate to, but that's just me.

But, trust me when I say this, it was not very dark or disturbing at all. In my head I was picturing people running away from a world of horror into a valley of beauty. Is that how you meant to portray it?


BluBliss GOLD said...
on Oct. 13 2011 at 3:30 pm
BluBliss GOLD, New York, New York
14 articles 0 photos 161 comments

Favorite Quote:
Bella's love for Edward was like, "Omg. He's hot. He's mine because he sparkles. Now I'll brood the wholle book while I'm with him."

I find it a little hard to...connect with. But still, i love its wording. Good job!

on Oct. 2 2011 at 9:10 am
JoPepper PLATINUM, Annandale, Virginia
35 articles 0 photos 782 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Freedom is the ability to not care what the other person thinks."

"Not all those who wander are lost" --JRR Tolkien

"When you are listening to music it is better to cover your eyes than your ears." --Jose' Bergamin

I don't see how it's about the black plague but that could be because I'm a little slow. But this was a fantastical poem! keep writig!!! ;D


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