Misplaced Perfection

September 22, 2011
By Paramour13 GOLD, Morris, Oklahoma
Paramour13 GOLD, Morris, Oklahoma
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Favorite Quote:
When life leaves us blind, Love keeps us kind.


Wave at me, as if you know me, as if you feel my pain;
Call to me, as if you ever loved me? Cared? I know you must feel ashamed;

You say “I love you, do your best” but I know you mean
“Do MY best, fulfill MY dreams.”

Have you ever considered me? My wants and my dreams?
No, you continue to kill me slowly;

You say I could care less, ignore my apparent misery.
Let’s face it, I’ll never amount to what you want me to be;

I know I’ll never be the joy in your heart, the sparkles in your eyes,
But you will never know how hard I always tried;

Misplaced perfection, I know this story all too well,
“It’s not you, it’s me.” Just be careful, liars burn in hell;

You know you can’t, so don’t try to change me.
Just let me live my life, being the best I can be;



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on Mar. 10 2012 at 11:10 pm
otherpoet SILVER, Wayland, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"For beautiful eyes, look for the good in others; for beautiful lips, speak only words of kindness; and for poise, walk with the knowledge that you are never alone." - Audrey Hepburn

The first thing I like about this poem is the different ways it can be interpreted. I really think you put a lot of your heart into this poem, I really enjoyed reading it!

on Nov. 30 2011 at 5:55 pm
xxtennis13xx SILVER, Clarkston, Michigan
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I suppose it does rhyme, with the right rhythm haha, I think I'm just too picky.

on Nov. 30 2011 at 11:31 am
Paramour13 GOLD, Morris, Oklahoma
11 articles 0 photos 44 comments

Favorite Quote:
When life leaves us blind, Love keeps us kind.

Thanks again!! :) Haha, I know what you mean, I'm sorry for that :/ and I would love to check out your work! :)

on Nov. 29 2011 at 4:56 pm
xxtennis13xx SILVER, Clarkston, Michigan
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I ADORE this poem (: I do like to criticise, however; The second stanza doesn't rhyme!!! The first rhyme is so perfectly formed that it completely threw off my rhythm with that missing rhyme, and it made it harder for me to get back into the rhymes again afterwords. The 'misplaced perfection' part was my favorite, scuh a beautiful oxymoron! Good work! Check out my poems?

on Nov. 17 2011 at 11:12 am
Paramour13 GOLD, Morris, Oklahoma
11 articles 0 photos 44 comments

Favorite Quote:
When life leaves us blind, Love keeps us kind.

Thank you!...

That's a very nice suggestion. I would love to do it, but I don't know that I could find words to say..


Shivam GOLD said...
on Nov. 17 2011 at 10:07 am
Shivam GOLD, Lucknow, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Its nothing like nothing or all.. its just that how far you climb up the tree before you fall..

good....

but i would like you to write a song....

from the viewpoint of your father also..


on Oct. 24 2011 at 3:07 pm
suziesnowflake GOLD, Virginia Beach, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"Whatever comes, let it come. Whatever stays, let it stay. Whatever goes, let it go."

this was a great way to express that feeling !

on Oct. 24 2011 at 11:42 am
Paramour13 GOLD, Morris, Oklahoma
11 articles 0 photos 44 comments

Favorite Quote:
When life leaves us blind, Love keeps us kind.

Thanks! I'm glad to know that others can relate!! :) I actually wrote it about my father who makes me feel like nothing i do is ever enough.

on Oct. 19 2011 at 2:53 pm
suziesnowflake GOLD, Virginia Beach, Virginia
12 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Whatever comes, let it come. Whatever stays, let it stay. Whatever goes, let it go."

this is good ! i get it completely. as if to say, someone wants YOU to do what THEY want you to & that what you want doesnt matter . this happens a lot in life . 


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