Goodbye for now.

September 10, 2011
By Kev-Girl SILVER, Plymouth, Indiana
Kev-Girl SILVER, Plymouth, Indiana
5 articles 0 photos 86 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is a maybe. Death is for sure. Sin is the cause. Christ is the cure. :)

Love is the breath of God, and prayer is the melody that makes it sing.

If you cant annoy someone, there's no point in writing.

Love is overrated, marry for money.


When I saw you
Come and sit next to me,
With your eyes so blue,
I felt like I could hardly breath.

You said "would you like to
come on a walk with me?"
I said yes, then you
took me to see
Your favorite place
then you handed me a mirror
to see the smile on my face
As you drew nearer.

Then you took my hand
and said "hey, do you believe in
destiny,
'Cause I believe
that you were meant for me."

Then I was delighted to see
You get down on one knee
And take out a ring
And say "Will you marry me?"

I hardly muffled a yes
'Cause I was hugging your neck.
It felt like all day
That we remained that way.

So as I stand here,
Looking down at your pale, lifeless face,
I let my tears fall on your chest,as I chase
That memory
Of you and me.

The good times we had
and the things we got to do.
The giggles and laughs
The jokes you told me, and I told you.

But now that is done
Because you are gone.
But still forever
our love will carry on.

And even though the light
is gone from your eyes,
I embrace you,
to say goodbye.
And it's almost as if I can hear you
telling me it's gonna be alright.
'Cause I will see you
In another life.


The author's comments:
I was originally going to write this as a song, but I had so much to say that I could not fit it in a song. I felt it right to write a sad love poem,because I had never done so before.:) hope you like it

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on May. 1 2013 at 8:15 pm
LexusMarie PLATINUM, Las Cruces, New Mexico
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Favorite Quote:
The more control you have over yourself, the less control others have over you.

Hey there! You are a very talented writer as it so clearly shows here in this poem and all of your other work. The fact that you are so talented and smart to know that you needed/wanted a lot of emotion in here and it had to be a poem and not a song to do that is very impressive. It's great to know that writer's can change their minds in order to make their work even better. The title lets the reader know that this will be a sad, but they want to read it.. the title is a bit mysterious! The third stanza is PRICELESS. Seriously, it was wicked good. It gave me chills in a girly little way.. it was so cute. This poem conveys some crazy emotion. The story is a sad one, but it is very good. I enjoyed reading it very much. Great job! I'd love to check your work out anytime! Let me know when you have new stuff, okay? Talk to you soon!

on May. 8 2012 at 12:55 pm
Kev-Girl SILVER, Plymouth, Indiana
5 articles 0 photos 86 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is a maybe. Death is for sure. Sin is the cause. Christ is the cure. :)

Love is the breath of God, and prayer is the melody that makes it sing.

If you cant annoy someone, there's no point in writing.

Love is overrated, marry for money.

Aww, thank you so much! You have no idea how much it really means to me to have people give such posotive feedback on my works, so thank you. 

 

And when I wrote this, I wrote it because I just wanted to try something new. It hadn't had any really personal meaning behind it, but not long after I wrote, something came up in my life, and this has a lot more of a personal story behind it then it did when I first wrote it. I mostly think of my really close friend who lost his wife almost seven months ago, and I think of the amazing marriage that had. It's hard without Nancy herem but I know I'll see her again. She was like a mother to me, and my poem Bond, Forever Strong is actually about her too. 

 

So thanks for the comment! I appreciate it! :)


on May. 4 2012 at 9:23 am
Zoe-22-Turner DIAMOND, Beverly, Massachusetts
99 articles 33 photos 91 comments
i thought this was going to be a happy love poem until i got halfway through, and i see the word "lifeless" and my breath caught in my throat and i began reading feverishly, tears were in my eyes, it was so sad, yet beautifully crafted, where did you get the idea for it?

on Dec. 16 2011 at 10:46 am
Ebony_Rose PLATINUM, Hot Springs, Arkansas
21 articles 0 photos 54 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The simplest way that i can understand therapy is that we're born a certain
way, we're taught to be something different, and we spend our whole lives
trying to unravel it and ultimately align ourselves with who we really are." ~Billy Corgan

Good Job :) try not to use thee word "said" as much though...

on Nov. 24 2011 at 9:58 am
kingofwriters BRONZE, DeWitt, Michigan
1 article 0 photos 196 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Books are a uniquely portable magic." - Stephen King

I love books, and I love technology, but I don't want to see the latter overwhelm the former. I just think books are meant to be pages you turn, not screens you scroll through.

Wow, this is a really good poem! Keep up the good work!

on Nov. 2 2011 at 10:43 pm
VandalSpirit DIAMOND, Pleasant Prairie, Wisconsin
51 articles 9 photos 186 comments

Favorite Quote:
Yet this I call to mind and therefore I have hope: Because of Gods great love, we are not consumed. His compassion never fail. They are new every morning; great is your faithfulness.

This is a really good poem! I recently went through a sort of loss, not through death, but I kinda know the feeling still and it can be really hard. You really did a good job of showing the right emotions.

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on Oct. 26 2011 at 8:36 pm
J4Yc3 GOLD, Nashville, Indiana
19 articles 0 photos 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
What doesn't kill you only makes you stronger

One of my favorites. Loved it a lot it really kept my attention GREAT work!

on Oct. 23 2011 at 8:44 am
JamesODalaigh BRONZE, Bandon, Other
4 articles 0 photos 32 comments

Favorite Quote:
Ever tried. Ever failed. No matter. Try Again. Fail again. Fail better -Samuel Beckett.
Don't be seduced into thinking that that which does not make a profit is without value -Arthur Miller.

Really powerful stuff, full of raw emotion. Great job.

on Oct. 17 2011 at 2:57 pm
RayBaytheDinosaur GOLD, Hampton, South Carolina
18 articles 17 photos 159 comments

Favorite Quote:
Beauty is in the eye of the beholder

Wow mood change much? It was all happy and romantic and then bam made me wanna cry. Really powerful though, and really good =)

on Oct. 12 2011 at 10:06 pm
AngelsLullaby GOLD, Neverland, Idaho
12 articles 7 photos 95 comments

Favorite Quote:
Music is a higher revelation from wisdom and philosophy. ~Ludwig Von Beethoven

Really great poem. It's very meaningful and its obvious you put alot of effort into making this perfect.

on Oct. 12 2011 at 2:26 am
JulieRae13 SILVER, /, Other
8 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
"All I ever learned from love was how to shoot somebody who outdrew you"

I think this is a great poem and I love the way it tells a story. If I had to give you some constructive criticsm it would be to maybe have more regular stanzas and a steady rhythym. However, your poem is lovely as is :)

on Oct. 9 2011 at 8:02 pm
Kev-Girl SILVER, Plymouth, Indiana
5 articles 0 photos 86 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is a maybe. Death is for sure. Sin is the cause. Christ is the cure. :)

Love is the breath of God, and prayer is the melody that makes it sing.

If you cant annoy someone, there's no point in writing.

Love is overrated, marry for money.

:D Thank you.

on Oct. 9 2011 at 7:50 pm
InfatuatedwithSadness SILVER, Miami, Florida
5 articles 0 photos 6 comments
This have so many different emotions in one. I really loved this. You went back to memories and then you snapped back to reality. This was amazing 5/5 for sure :)

on Oct. 9 2011 at 12:50 pm
Kev-Girl SILVER, Plymouth, Indiana
5 articles 0 photos 86 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is a maybe. Death is for sure. Sin is the cause. Christ is the cure. :)

Love is the breath of God, and prayer is the melody that makes it sing.

If you cant annoy someone, there's no point in writing.

Love is overrated, marry for money.

Thank you very much! :)

leafy said...
on Oct. 9 2011 at 12:41 pm
leafy, City, Other
0 articles 0 photos 682 comments

Favorite Quote:
Gil: I would like you to read my novel and get your opinion. 
Ernest Hemingway: I hate it. 
Gil: You haven't even read it yet. 
Ernest Hemingway: If it's bad, I'll hate it. If it's good, then I'll be envious and hate it even more. You don't want the opinion of another writer. 

Wow kev-girl, this is really nice! That's annoying though how the quote marks messed it up...but like other than that, your poem was awesome and meaningful 5/5

on Oct. 8 2011 at 9:44 am
Cody_Goelz PLATINUM, Fort Wayne, Indiana
25 articles 0 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
Only God Can Judge Me
2pac Amaru Shakur

life goes on
2pac Amaru Shakur

ive filled two composition books on my third and i think it is good. do you relate your poetry to your life?

on Oct. 8 2011 at 9:01 am
Kev-Girl SILVER, Plymouth, Indiana
5 articles 0 photos 86 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is a maybe. Death is for sure. Sin is the cause. Christ is the cure. :)

Love is the breath of God, and prayer is the melody that makes it sing.

If you cant annoy someone, there's no point in writing.

Love is overrated, marry for money.

Wow, thanks cody_Goelz! I'm actually still pretty new to writing poety, and this is only my,like, 4th poem I've ever written! So it means alot to know that it's good! :)

on Oct. 7 2011 at 8:20 pm
Cody_Goelz PLATINUM, Fort Wayne, Indiana
25 articles 0 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
Only God Can Judge Me
2pac Amaru Shakur

life goes on
2pac Amaru Shakur

this is really good you should write more stuff im anxious to see more this is flawless

on Oct. 7 2011 at 7:53 am
Kev-Girl SILVER, Plymouth, Indiana
5 articles 0 photos 86 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is a maybe. Death is for sure. Sin is the cause. Christ is the cure. :)

Love is the breath of God, and prayer is the melody that makes it sing.

If you cant annoy someone, there's no point in writing.

Love is overrated, marry for money.

Wow, I'm so sorry your boyfriend died. :( But I'm glad you could kinda relate to the poem! Thanks for the comment!

Taylor D. said...
on Oct. 6 2011 at 7:56 pm
Wow, i'm literally almost crying. This really meant a lot to me, my boyfriend of 2 years, died a few months ago and this really hit the spot! You're so talented! Good Job!


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