She is

September 14, 2011
She doesn't care for sunset
She doesn't care for dawn
She thinks that they are beautiful
But she likes the things beyond

Her hands are hard and callused
Her nose is far too big
But she has never seen her face
Except for in a mirror

She’s always hiding something
She always know the truth
She’s very good and lying
And great at being true

She likes to sing at midnight
She likes to sleep at noon
She likes to wake the others up
With her favorite tune

In the morning she is wise
In the night she is youthful
But there are times, not so often
When she’s just like me and you

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Garnet77 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Oct. 20, 2011 at 4:18 am
Great poem! I love it! The second stanza didn't seem to follow te same rhyming scheme as the other stanzas, so it seems a bit out of place. But it's really just my opinion. This is actually a really great poem. I love that it flows really well, and grabs the reader's attention so well. Amazing job, really :)
Little.Miss said...
Oct. 19, 2011 at 5:01 pm
I liked this a lot! The only thing I didn't get was how she never saw her face... except for in a mirror? It's kind of mysterious and confusing, yet interesting? Maybe you could explain it to me!
SwallowedByInsanity This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Oct. 19, 2011 at 4:00 pm

I agree with them, I definitly thought of stargirl when I read this!

Your writing style is much different than mine, but that's not a bad thing.

I liked this... it was very blunt and to the point. I personally like long lacey descriptions, but that's just my opinion. Keep writing!

JoPepper said...
Oct. 2, 2011 at 9:06 am

Pretty good I liked it except in the line

"She always know the truth"

I think you meant "knows" other than that 5/5!!!! :D

DaughterofEvil said...
Oct. 1, 2011 at 1:51 am
Your poem reminded me of Stargirl. I liked it quite a bit. I'm quite a bit like her, actually. 4/5
Emiri replied...
Oct. 13, 2011 at 3:28 pm
Yeah, it is alot like Stargirl...only less crazy. :p I like it!
Abigail H. replied...
Oct. 13, 2011 at 9:46 pm
I love it! I think that it shows that people can be different, but not bad. Yah, it is A LOT like Stargirl! Cool! :)
wordjunkie replied...
Oct. 19, 2011 at 8:47 pm
I like it! The style is fun and interesting, and though maybe a bit dreamy it does have personality.
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