The Girl

September 9, 2011
Eyes like diamonds
Crystallized and sweet
Lips that are perfect
Or at least they are to me

Voice like an angel
The way she speaks,i cannot explain
There is nothing on this girl
That you could call plain

She is everything i could ask for
So smart, so fine
Please tell me
Why she cannot be mine?

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Swift13Fearless said...
Oct. 25, 2011 at 9:04 am
Awwh this is cute!
Glory said...
Oct. 17, 2011 at 2:00 pm
Sooooooo cute!! I'm a big fan of this one!
SassyJones said...
Oct. 15, 2011 at 8:28 pm
i hope this girl knows how you feel. or else its a shame. read some of my stuff? thanks. ask her out 
Lexie96 replied...
Oct. 24, 2011 at 6:41 am
I got to agree, if you haven't already ask her out. Good luck! Think that you could check out some of my work? Please?
CarolinaBoy23 replied...
Oct. 26, 2011 at 4:29 pm
Haha dont worry bout it guys. I wrote this about two years ago. Me and this girl dated for a few months. but thanks for the feedback. Im glad you like it and i'll be sure to read yours when i get a chance.
thatshykid said...
Oct. 13, 2011 at 3:54 pm
i luv this so much
inside_wonders19 said...
Oct. 9, 2011 at 12:26 pm
i rly love this. it made me smile and you should write more work about this "new girl".... i think she inspires you well
MissUnderStood.2011 said...
Oct. 4, 2011 at 2:06 pm
rey good.. Readsome of mines and add me on Facebook Swayze Spencer
Blue4 said...
Sept. 30, 2011 at 4:58 pm

Good job! The rhyme is very good, and I really like how simple and true-sounding this is. Perhaps try to add some unusual imagery to make the poem less ordinary?

Could you please read some of my work, rate, and tell me what you think? I'd appreciate it :)

CarolinaBoy23 replied...
Oct. 1, 2011 at 10:53 am
Thanks for the feedback. im glad you liked it. I'll be sure to read your work when i can.
Evagline.Brisa.Wilder replied...
Sept. 18, 2012 at 9:56 pm
Wow. This is great. I never knew a guy could write with such emotion about a girl. Most nimrod boys are just jerks. Okay. I have underestimated what boys can write, but you made me wrong. This is good. I wonder only what she would say. From a girl
Evagline.Brisa.Wilder replied...
Sept. 18, 2012 at 9:57 pm
Look at one of mine in reture!
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