Breathe

September 16, 2011
By BeautifulTragedy BRONZE, North Branch, Michigan
BeautifulTragedy BRONZE, North Branch, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
Open your mind before your mouth.


I wish you would peak,
into my real life.
Open the cover carefully,
and skI'm all the pages.

I wish you would see,
all my dirty little secrets.
That are kept locked away,
the ones I'm too scared to say.

I wish you would help me,
check everyday for a slip.
Take away all my favorite toys,
until I can just give up.

I wish you the best,
for you and for her.
But now we need to talk about me,
because I'm not acting the way i should be.

Can't you tell?
I wish you could open your eyes,
because I'm standing here alone,
and i can't breathe.


The author's comments:
Written when I really needed a friend.

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on Sep. 24 2011 at 2:24 pm
BeautifulTragedy BRONZE, North Branch, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
Open your mind before your mouth.

The poem is about a rough time I had when my ex left me for another girl, when he found out I had hurt myself. So the poem is saying, "why did you leave? Right now I need you more than ever, I know you found your world but don't forget about me. Something is wrong and I don't know what."

They weren't on purpose I was very tired when I wrote and typed this. Thank you so much for commenting, it means a lot to me! (:


yuka11 SILVER said...
on Sep. 24 2011 at 1:33 pm
yuka11 SILVER, Gilmer, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"For my soul delighteth in the song of the heart; yea the song of the righteous is a prayer unto me, and it shall be answered with a blessing upon their heads." -Doctrine and Covenants 25:12

I like the depth of meaning. I'm kind of confused, though, about who the audience is, who "you" is. Are you wishing for an enemy to see the real you? There are a couple misspellings (peak is peek and skI'm is skim)- are they on purpose/typos? I especially like your last line- "and I can't breathe."




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