you and I

September 6, 2011
At first you were all I needed
you and I were all I could think of
people said that I wouldn’t keep it
all I needed was a leap of faith
but I was invisible to you
I was just in the friend to you
while you were on your own
I was all alone like a shadow on a cloudy day
as I waited on you and the sunshine
then I let you know that I was in love with you
so you could see my true beauty
then we were together like a dream come true
but then my dream shattered
when we disagreed often
we fought about almost every thing
we fought until I cried
and yelled until we were horse
we broke up more than a dozen times
our relationship made me frustrated
and then there was the argument
that broke us up for good
and now that is all I think of
at first I thought it was a tragedy
I will miss the good times greatly
but I won’t miss the fights
that still kept me up at night
our first kiss sent sparks flying
now you wont even look at me
we wrote notes to each other every day
and now you wont even talk to me
I will never be in a relationship with you
ever again

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Paradise_Lost said...
Dec. 1, 2011 at 9:29 am
I love this!
the-tears-Im-crying-dont-deserve-you replied...
Dec. 1, 2011 at 9:30 am
Thanks so much
Basketball23 said...
Sept. 28, 2011 at 2:37 pm
I really like this.  It kinda seems like something that someone actually went through.....but yahh I really like it!
Dontbeahaterbealover replied...
Sept. 30, 2011 at 11:05 am
it is what I went through I submited it in a contest an dI got to the semi finals yahh
Basketball23 replied...
Sept. 30, 2011 at 7:40 pm
Aww I'm sorry! :(
Dontbeahaterbealover replied...
Oct. 2, 2011 at 11:20 am
well now I think of it as if I never meet him I never would have gone through it and I never would have wrote this and never gotten to the semi finals
Basketball23 replied...
Oct. 2, 2011 at 8:21 pm
True, very true.  I was in a rough relationship too once, and the day we broke up was on of the best days of my life haha;)
Dontbeahaterbealover replied...
Oct. 3, 2011 at 9:12 am
same here with me at first I was devistated but then I relized that he was just bringing my self esteem down evern more when we were together. And after we broke up My esteem was better
Basketball23 replied...
Oct. 5, 2011 at 2:19 pm
Oh my goodness that's like exactly what happened with me!!!
the-tears-im-crying-dont-deserve-you replied...
Oct. 6, 2011 at 11:01 am
well thank god that we went through it and learnned a lesson
Basketball23 replied...
Oct. 6, 2011 at 8:45 pm
Yahh, anyway!
the-tears-im-crying-dont-deserve-you replied...
Oct. 7, 2011 at 10:54 am
any way what
Basketball23 replied...
Oct. 7, 2011 at 5:48 pm
That we both learned a lesson from it.
the-tears-im-crying-dont-deserve-you replied...
Oct. 10, 2011 at 9:44 am
yep so he is back at school
leafy This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 20, 2011 at 1:44 pm
Very nice! Although I would have liked some puncuation. I think you were leaving that out on purpose, but it's nice fir the reader to have at least some commas, or else everything just kinda runs together and you can't really appreciate the beauty of th eactual poem as much. So if you fix that, it would be just awesome. Keep up the nice work!
Dontbeahaterbealover replied...
Sept. 20, 2011 at 1:47 pm
thank you that means a lot to me
leafy This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Sept. 20, 2011 at 2:05 pm
You're welcome!:)
cookiegirl said...
Sept. 20, 2011 at 11:27 am
It's well written, nice poem:). Good job!
Dontbeahaterbealover replied...
Sept. 20, 2011 at 1:15 pm
thank you all of this just comes naturaly to me
Dontbeahaterbealover said...
Sept. 19, 2011 at 1:25 pm
please tell me how I did on this poem
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