you and I

September 6, 2011
the-tears-im-crying-dont-deserve-you PLATINUM, Batesville, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
love comes and goes,
just like the watter flows


At first you were all I needed
you and I were all I could think of
people said that I wouldn’t keep it
all I needed was a leap of faith
but I was invisible to you
I was just in the friend to you
while you were on your own
I was all alone like a shadow on a cloudy day
as I waited on you and the sunshine
then I let you know that I was in love with you
so you could see my true beauty
then we were together like a dream come true
but then my dream shattered
when we disagreed often
we fought about almost every thing
we fought until I cried
and yelled until we were horse
we broke up more than a dozen times
our relationship made me frustrated
and then there was the argument
that broke us up for good
and now that is all I think of
at first I thought it was a tragedy
I will miss the good times greatly
but I won’t miss the fights
that still kept me up at night
our first kiss sent sparks flying
now you wont even look at me
we wrote notes to each other every day
and now you wont even talk to me
I will never be in a relationship with you
ever again


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It comes naturaly

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on Dec. 1 2011 at 9:30 am
the-tears-im-crying-dont-deserve-you PLATINUM, Batesville, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
love comes and goes,
just like the watter flows

Thanks so much

on Dec. 1 2011 at 9:29 am
Paradise_Lost BRONZE, Mountville, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
But paradise is locked and bolted; we must make a journey around the world to see if the back door has, perhaps, been left open.

Swearing is the last refuge of the imaginitively bankrupt.

I love this!

on Oct. 10 2011 at 9:44 am
the-tears-im-crying-dont-deserve-you PLATINUM, Batesville, Indiana
32 articles 0 photos 38 comments

Favorite Quote:
love comes and goes,
just like the watter flows

thank you

 


on Oct. 10 2011 at 9:44 am
the-tears-im-crying-dont-deserve-you PLATINUM, Batesville, Indiana
32 articles 0 photos 38 comments

Favorite Quote:
love comes and goes,
just like the watter flows

yep so he is back at school

on Oct. 8 2011 at 5:33 pm
KellyAnne88 GOLD, Long Beach, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Hey, I heard you were a wild one, all the more fun to persue."

Very powerful. Love it.

on Oct. 7 2011 at 5:48 pm
Basketball23 SILVER, Pine Grove, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"I'm living in a shell with no soul" -Three Days Grace (World So Cold)
"Time still turns the pages of the book it's burned" -Avenged Sevenfold (So Far Away)

That we both learned a lesson from it.

on Oct. 7 2011 at 10:54 am
the-tears-im-crying-dont-deserve-you PLATINUM, Batesville, Indiana
32 articles 0 photos 38 comments

Favorite Quote:
love comes and goes,
just like the watter flows

any way what

on Oct. 6 2011 at 8:45 pm
Basketball23 SILVER, Pine Grove, Pennsylvania
8 articles 13 photos 488 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I'm living in a shell with no soul" -Three Days Grace (World So Cold)
"Time still turns the pages of the book it's burned" -Avenged Sevenfold (So Far Away)

Yahh, anyway!

on Oct. 6 2011 at 11:01 am
the-tears-im-crying-dont-deserve-you PLATINUM, Batesville, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
love comes and goes,
just like the watter flows

well thank god that we went through it and learnned a lesson

on Oct. 5 2011 at 2:19 pm
Basketball23 SILVER, Pine Grove, Pennsylvania
8 articles 13 photos 488 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I'm living in a shell with no soul" -Three Days Grace (World So Cold)
"Time still turns the pages of the book it's burned" -Avenged Sevenfold (So Far Away)

Oh my goodness that's like exactly what happened with me!!!

on Oct. 3 2011 at 9:12 am
the-tears-im-crying-dont-deserve-you PLATINUM, Batesville, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
love comes and goes,
just like the watter flows

same here with me at first I was devistated but then I relized that he was just bringing my self esteem down evern more when we were together. And after we broke up My esteem was better

on Oct. 2 2011 at 8:21 pm
Basketball23 SILVER, Pine Grove, Pennsylvania
8 articles 13 photos 488 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I'm living in a shell with no soul" -Three Days Grace (World So Cold)
"Time still turns the pages of the book it's burned" -Avenged Sevenfold (So Far Away)

True, very true.  I was in a rough relationship too once, and the day we broke up was on of the best days of my life haha;)

on Oct. 2 2011 at 11:20 am
the-tears-im-crying-dont-deserve-you PLATINUM, Batesville, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
love comes and goes,
just like the watter flows

well now I think of it as if I never meet him I never would have gone through it and I never would have wrote this and never gotten to the semi finals

on Sep. 30 2011 at 7:40 pm
Basketball23 SILVER, Pine Grove, Pennsylvania
8 articles 13 photos 488 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I'm living in a shell with no soul" -Three Days Grace (World So Cold)
"Time still turns the pages of the book it's burned" -Avenged Sevenfold (So Far Away)

Aww I'm sorry! :(

on Sep. 30 2011 at 11:05 am
the-tears-im-crying-dont-deserve-you PLATINUM, Batesville, Indiana
32 articles 0 photos 38 comments

Favorite Quote:
love comes and goes,
just like the watter flows

it is what I went through I submited it in a contest an dI got to the semi finals yahh

on Sep. 28 2011 at 2:37 pm
Basketball23 SILVER, Pine Grove, Pennsylvania
8 articles 13 photos 488 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I'm living in a shell with no soul" -Three Days Grace (World So Cold)
"Time still turns the pages of the book it's burned" -Avenged Sevenfold (So Far Away)

I really like this.  It kinda seems like something that someone actually went through.....but yahh I really like it!

leafy said...
on Sep. 20 2011 at 2:05 pm
leafy, City, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Gil: I would like you to read my novel and get your opinion. 
Ernest Hemingway: I hate it. 
Gil: You haven't even read it yet. 
Ernest Hemingway: If it's bad, I'll hate it. If it's good, then I'll be envious and hate it even more. You don't want the opinion of another writer. 

You're welcome!:)

on Sep. 20 2011 at 1:47 pm
the-tears-im-crying-dont-deserve-you PLATINUM, Batesville, Indiana
32 articles 0 photos 38 comments

Favorite Quote:
love comes and goes,
just like the watter flows

thank you that means a lot to me

leafy said...
on Sep. 20 2011 at 1:44 pm
leafy, City, Other
0 articles 0 photos 682 comments

Favorite Quote:
Gil: I would like you to read my novel and get your opinion. 
Ernest Hemingway: I hate it. 
Gil: You haven't even read it yet. 
Ernest Hemingway: If it's bad, I'll hate it. If it's good, then I'll be envious and hate it even more. You don't want the opinion of another writer. 

Very nice! Although I would have liked some puncuation. I think you were leaving that out on purpose, but it's nice fir the reader to have at least some commas, or else everything just kinda runs together and you can't really appreciate the beauty of th eactual poem as much. So if you fix that, it would be just awesome. Keep up the nice work!

on Sep. 20 2011 at 1:15 pm
the-tears-im-crying-dont-deserve-you PLATINUM, Batesville, Indiana
32 articles 0 photos 38 comments

Favorite Quote:
love comes and goes,
just like the watter flows

thank you all of this just comes naturaly to me




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