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Cause when I close my eyes.....

Gone through that strait
gone through the devil tide
where the feathers swirl round and the horses ride
looked for thee through the eternal eye
but when I closed my eyes
I saw you on my heart's other side.

Forever I played the heart's silly games
Nothing but the unbearable likeness
of thee to me tames
my eyes meet thine through hot air I am still fine
but then just this heart starts mayhem.

Wanna spend the rest of this life with thee
In thy sorrow there's mine, in your glee, there's my glee
Pretty damn this hearts running too wide
Cause babe when i close my eyes....
i see you on my heart's other side.



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Abhilash_ftwThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Dec. 30, 2011 at 10:16 pm
sure! I would love to! :)
 
Illuminatus said...
Dec. 26, 2011 at 3:38 am
Great work abhi ! Loved every bit of it .... Full of emotions and commitment ... P.s: I do think that you were inspired by someone , as i think it is devoted to someone you love ! XD
 
Fizzy_Girl said...
Dec. 18, 2011 at 10:49 am

.very nice work. 3/5 stars from me. :)

 

would u like to check out some of my work? comment if u do. :)

 
YandahLIBgirll said...
Dec. 6, 2011 at 7:09 am
i really like this great work
 
Abhilash_ftwThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Dec. 7, 2011 at 9:43 am
thanks yandah!
 
Traceyacey said...
Dec. 1, 2011 at 6:44 am
very good the word wanna is a little weird but i besides that your use of words was great!
 
Abhilash_ftwThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Dec. 3, 2011 at 7:06 am
thanks tracey!
 
AlkaPradhanThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Nov. 30, 2011 at 7:52 am

Awsome writing.....!!!

Its a relative wrok and could be related to real world

 
Abhilash_ftwThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Nov. 30, 2011 at 7:56 am
thanks a lot!
 
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