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I have infiltrated the dark and approached the seized,
I have battled with the light-less vacuum to rescue the confined,
The darkness left its prey and the prey left me,
I wonder if the sun would ever ask “I burn for you, who will burn for me?”
I wonder if I should ask who will go for me.


I have entered the deep blues to hold the entrapped,
I have swirled in the whirlpool with the watery helixes surpassed,
The waves left its captive and the captive swam out with glee.
I wonder if the waters ever asked, “Whom do I drink when you drink me?”
I wonder if I should ask who will go for me.


I have rammed in the structures with solo presence,
I have filled in voids with together essence,
The void found its fill but the filler encountered a void.
I wonder if the bricks in buildings ever asked “I fill the buildings, but who will fill me?”
I wonder if I should ask who will go for me.


I have zoomed into the interrogative fire to accompany the puzzled,
I turned all queries into concord and kept the puzzled muffled.
The situation turned a dot for the question mark to flee,
I wonder if the answer ever asked “I am I to you, but who is me to me?”
I wonder if the answer will ask me “Who will go for me” when I ask “Who will go for me”.



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Lola_BlackThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Sept. 18, 2011 at 8:20 pm:
I like this! Very expressive and creative. I absolutely love that sentence, "I am I to you, but who is me to me?" Wonderfully written!
 
GoldenEagle replied...
Sept. 19, 2011 at 8:42 am :
Thank you very mind for your kind words and appreciation. 
 
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Laura_Oliver said...
Sept. 18, 2011 at 4:32 pm:
I really like this poem--well written with a nice meaning behind it as well, which is (ahem) and unfortunately uncommon combination. Plus I would appreciate it if you could check out some of my poems and leave some feedback.
 
GoldenEagle replied...
Sept. 22, 2011 at 11:17 am :

Thank you so much for your kind words.

I just went through your stuff and all your creations are amazing..

 
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Thesilentraven This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 18, 2011 at 3:23 pm:

A powerful poem indeed. Less about light and dark than about salvation, and the strange way it works. You raise a deeply emotional question, "who will save the hero?" I don't know whether or not the question is supposed to remain rhetorical, but if God's grace rescued people in the first place, I don't think the hero would be an exception.

Well done, friend, you have lit a candle.

 
GoldenEagle replied...
Sept. 19, 2011 at 8:47 am :

Thank you very much for the kind words.

And as far as justification on the fact that "God rescues everybody" is concerned, YES, god rescues everybody and the hero is no exception. But equally true is a fact that God himself doesnt descend down from heaven to help people. He does it through mediums- humans. So here the protagonist questions that who will be his hero..

Thanking you again for your kind words. Glad to receive positive feedback.

 
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