Witness

September 9, 2011
By PaigeStreet PLATINUM, Juneau, Alaska
PaigeStreet PLATINUM, Juneau, Alaska
47 articles 0 photos 218 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Stay golden"
- Johnny (The Outsiders, S. E. Hinton)


Black wing snaps
Cracks
Still air
Sick and dry
With the heat of seven summers

Thick black sole
Taps out memory's tune
On gritty pavement dark with rain

Firefly
Waltzing through corn stalks
Doesn't mind a thin black cat
Who's lost

It's almost 4:00 here
Which means you must be asleep
By now


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on Dec. 26 2011 at 1:00 am
PaigeStreet PLATINUM, Juneau, Alaska
47 articles 0 photos 218 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Stay golden"
- Johnny (The Outsiders, S. E. Hinton)

Thanks :D I'm all about the lovely and the mystical.

on Dec. 26 2011 at 12:58 am
PaigeStreet PLATINUM, Juneau, Alaska
47 articles 0 photos 218 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Stay golden"
- Johnny (The Outsiders, S. E. Hinton)

Atmosphere. Good word. Thank you :)

on Dec. 25 2011 at 11:15 pm
PhoenixCrossing GOLD, Tinley Park, Illinois
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This piece has a really mystical air and I like that. Great job with it. Again, very strong imagery.

on Nov. 29 2011 at 11:39 pm
sophza PLATINUM, Sacramento, California
21 articles 14 photos 47 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life moves pretty fast. If you don't stop and look around once in a while, you could miss it." ~Ferris Bueller

Wow, that's really vivid imagery! I got a clear feeling of the atomosphere.

on Nov. 29 2011 at 5:35 pm
LifesIllusion BRONZE, Cicero, Indiana
4 articles 0 photos 127 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't let your fears slow you down. Instead, chase them down and beat them."

Totally random! But it is so good. Everything you wrote I can picture in my mind with such epic detail. Great Poem! 5/5 stars

leafy said...
on Nov. 19 2011 at 9:29 am
leafy, City, Other
0 articles 0 photos 682 comments

Favorite Quote:
Gil: I would like you to read my novel and get your opinion. 
Ernest Hemingway: I hate it. 
Gil: You haven't even read it yet. 
Ernest Hemingway: If it's bad, I'll hate it. If it's good, then I'll be envious and hate it even more. You don't want the opinion of another writer. 

Random? Slightly, but that's good. The flow? Amazing. Imagery? Excellent. And yah, the picture seems like it was made for this poem. 5/5

on Sep. 26 2011 at 11:42 pm
PaigeStreet PLATINUM, Juneau, Alaska
47 articles 0 photos 218 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Stay golden"
- Johnny (The Outsiders, S. E. Hinton)

Thank you. I was lucky to come across that picture, as it has everything to do with the poem. 

on Sep. 26 2011 at 11:40 pm
PaigeStreet PLATINUM, Juneau, Alaska
47 articles 0 photos 218 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Stay golden"
- Johnny (The Outsiders, S. E. Hinton)

Thank you- that certainly means more, coming from you!

Steph0804 GOLD said...
on Sep. 26 2011 at 11:37 pm
Steph0804 GOLD, Seoul, Other
12 articles 4 photos 206 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Explaining a joke is like dissecting a frog: you understand it better, but the frog dies in the process." -E.B. White

I really like the flow of this! The descriptions are vivid too.. Nice!

on Sep. 21 2011 at 7:15 pm
Branden Navedo SILVER, Oklahoma, Maryland
5 articles 0 photos 17 comments
I found this very interesting. The picture and the poem seem to have some sort of connection, at least to me... One of the most interesting I've read, honestly. 

on Sep. 14 2011 at 9:52 pm
CarrieAnn13 GOLD, Goodsoil, Other
12 articles 10 photos 1648 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I love deadlines. I like the whooshing sound they make as they fly by." --Douglas Adams

"The object of life is not to be on the side of the majority, but to escape finding oneself in the ranks of the insane." --Marcus Aurelius

Truly, this is really random.  But I like it!  I really have no criticism, so excellent work!




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