Deceit

August 24, 2011
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It waits until you’re almost asleep
And croons to you with its nightingale voice
Lulling, caressing, fondling
As it turns its scaled visage away
Cowering if your eyes are open

But if they’re not,
Beware
Stranger, beware
Of mustard gas
Of poppy seeds
Of anacondas
Which as you stroke them
Wind their tails around your neck





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AmayaSakaruta said...
Dec. 13, 2011 at 11:21 am

this rocks. i love stuff like this :D

please check out some of my poetry and my fiction peice Broken Glass Mirror, and give feedback?

 
Blue4 replied...
Dec. 13, 2011 at 2:13 pm
Thanks! will do...
 
EbbzH said...
Oct. 23, 2011 at 11:33 pm
Very nice imagery and descriptions. This paints a very realistic picture
 
Blue4 replied...
Oct. 24, 2011 at 4:55 pm
Thank you.
 
GothChik95 said...
Oct. 9, 2011 at 6:22 pm
Oh my god this is dark, twisted, and demented! I love stuff like this! I love the thing with the anacondas! Keep writing like this!
 
Blue4 replied...
Oct. 9, 2011 at 7:53 pm
How very true... I know it's quite twisted :) Thank you very much!
 
emilybwrites said...
Sept. 30, 2011 at 3:54 pm
wow this is really good i loved your use of imagery:) "wind their tails around your neck" genius!
 
Blue4 replied...
Sept. 30, 2011 at 5:11 pm
Wow, thanks!
 
Blue4 replied...
Sept. 30, 2011 at 5:12 pm
I just realized that I stole your exclamation :)
 
Anonymous_7 said...
Sept. 27, 2011 at 10:34 pm
This is kinda dark. But great! I love how you have to stop and think about it. Some great things have to be a little creepy :) Keep it up! and thanks for commenting on my work!
 
Blue4 replied...
Sept. 28, 2011 at 2:51 pm
Thank you. My writing does sometimes lean toward the creepy side... (and you're welcome, I was waiting for something to show up :)
 
14jespax said...
Sept. 25, 2011 at 5:12 pm
I really like this poem. It seems kinda dark, but it also really makes you think. It's very interesting! Thanks for reading and commenting on my poem, too! 
 
Blue4 replied...
Sept. 25, 2011 at 7:14 pm
Thanks, and you're welcome. I'm really glad that you like it. It was getting a little depressing that this poem was not getting any responses.
 
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