As Deep As My Mind

September 7, 2011
By , Sabattus, ME
i've built a raft

strong at point 'a',

yet changes

are to be made

if 'b' will get nearer.

waves are getting higher

and higher.

i've no mast to raise

my spirits.

left guessing weather by

color of the sky.

there's a hollow base,

only i can float on.

one sharp, wrong, move can

easily ending this wandering.

i get lonely enough, the

wood and scraps speak back,


i've yet to stumble across more,

or land,

where there's room for two,

hopefully insane yet sane.

no compass, only a horizon.

no steerage, barely balancing.

when did this start

where have i sent myself


there's no end, only sleep.

point 'a' was forever ago,

point 'b' doesn't exist.

I'm bound to the sea,

becoming one with its


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Peanut_time said...
Sept. 13, 2011 at 8:29 pm

Interesting. I'll admit that you're poetry is very very introspective, I have no criticisms, as it may be the browser I'm using that is screwing up your formatting, but I shall get on to what I think of it.

You have this sort of desolate feeling about you. The world seems to be against your favor, and you only have so little with you in your life, symbolized by the raft. I'd rather not think of that raft at point A being stronger, as in life we go through struggles that make us stronge... (more »)

glitterham said...
Sept. 12, 2011 at 2:44 pm
this is seriously the most meaningful and brilliant poem i have ever read. I hope i interpetted it right. But i'm in love with this poem.
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