Coward...

August 29, 2011
By Anonymous_7 SILVER, Branson, Missouri
Anonymous_7 SILVER, Branson, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
-The only time you can get away with murder is when writing a book!


Like the coward I was I stood with the living. Like the coward I was I laid among the Dead. Waiting for my enemies to pass over me. So when darkness came I ran away, not to be counted where I lay.

The author's comments:
I dont write poetry very often. Please comment/rate and tell me what you think.

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on Nov. 28 2011 at 10:15 pm
midnitewanderer GOLD, West Des Moines, Iowa
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Favorite Quote:
Don't let what you can't do stop you from doing what you can do.
John Wooden
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.
Eleanor Roosevelt

I like the format, but the concept is also pretty great and thought provoking=)

Check my stuff out? Maybe some tips?

Thanks and Keep Writing!


on Oct. 18 2011 at 5:58 pm
tes1634 PLATINUM, Olive Hill, Kentucky
46 articles 16 photos 17 comments
welcome smelcome :)

on Oct. 15 2011 at 4:27 pm
Anonymous_7 SILVER, Branson, Missouri
6 articles 0 photos 119 comments

Favorite Quote:
-The only time you can get away with murder is when writing a book!

Thanks for the comment! I sure will check it out.

on Oct. 15 2011 at 1:23 pm
billlover420 GOLD, Justin, Texas
12 articles 0 photos 71 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boy, when you're dead, they really fix you up. I hope to hell when I do die somebody has sense enough to just dump me in the river or something. Anything except sticking me in a goddam cemetery.  People coming and putting a bunch of flowers on your stomach on Sunday, and all that crap. Who wants flowers when you're dead? Nobody. ~J.D. Salinger,The Catcher in the Rye,

this is very good :D i love what u wrote <3 u are a very good wriiter i hope u keep it up

if u could check out mine and tell me what u think i would very much apperciate it


on Oct. 15 2011 at 12:53 pm
Anonymous_7 SILVER, Branson, Missouri
6 articles 0 photos 119 comments

Favorite Quote:
-The only time you can get away with murder is when writing a book!

Thank you very much! That means alot.

 


on Oct. 13 2011 at 9:03 pm
tes1634 PLATINUM, Olive Hill, Kentucky
46 articles 16 photos 17 comments
for you not to write poetry very much, you gotta nack for it :) lol, i really liked the depth of it. i even went back and re-read it like twice to take it all in :) nice workkkk:)

on Oct. 6 2011 at 4:18 pm
Anonymous_7 SILVER, Branson, Missouri
6 articles 0 photos 119 comments

Favorite Quote:
-The only time you can get away with murder is when writing a book!

 Thanks. But I dont think you can learn to write, Its kinda just there. But a book that really helped me was    "Writing Magic" you should check it out. 

on Oct. 5 2011 at 10:59 pm
BeautysBeast GOLD, Okinawa, Other
11 articles 0 photos 45 comments

Favorite Quote:
BETTER TO BE YOURSELF AND BE NOBODY THAN BE SOMEONE ELSE AND SOMEBODY ;)

okay.... xD where did you learn to write like this maybe you could read my stuff and give me some help xD please? :)

on Oct. 3 2011 at 8:28 pm
Anonymous_7 SILVER, Branson, Missouri
6 articles 0 photos 119 comments

Favorite Quote:
-The only time you can get away with murder is when writing a book!

thank you for the comment!

 


on Oct. 2 2011 at 7:34 pm
14jespax BRONZE, Kansas City, Kansas
3 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everyone wants happiness, no one wants pain but you can't make a rainbow without a little rain."

Besides the spacing thing that previous people have talked about, I really liked your poem! It was really interesting. :) 

on Sep. 27 2011 at 10:45 pm
Anonymous_7 SILVER, Branson, Missouri
6 articles 0 photos 119 comments

Favorite Quote:
-The only time you can get away with murder is when writing a book!

Thanks for the advice!

on Sep. 25 2011 at 11:59 am
Blue4indigo PLATINUM, Sturbridge, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
I'd rather be sorry for something that I did than for something I didn't do.
-Red Scott

This is really nice work, but if it's poetry, putting everything in one big paragraph is a big no-no. Expiriment with lines, read it out loud to hear a pattern that you like. I really like the feeling of it, though, and the message as well.

Could you read my poem "Deceit" (repetetive, I know, but in case you see this first...) and tell me what you think? Thanks.


on Sep. 16 2011 at 11:55 pm
Anonymous_7 SILVER, Branson, Missouri
6 articles 0 photos 119 comments

Favorite Quote:
-The only time you can get away with murder is when writing a book!

Thanks!

 


on Sep. 16 2011 at 12:14 pm
iamonecoolradiator, London, Other
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This was really haunting, but in a good way! it definitely creates an effect but maybe you could space it out like the person before said and you could even extend it slightly, though the length it is does leave you thinking about it.

on Sep. 10 2011 at 3:27 pm
Anonymous_7 SILVER, Branson, Missouri
6 articles 0 photos 119 comments

Favorite Quote:
-The only time you can get away with murder is when writing a book!

I hey thanks for the advice. Im not very good at poetry and this makes more since.  :)

on Sep. 9 2011 at 8:45 am
emilybwrites SILVER, Villa Hills, Kentucky
5 articles 0 photos 112 comments

Favorite Quote:
last night i lay in bed, looking up at the stars and i thought to myself, where the heck is the ceiling?

this is pretty good...it had a good idea if you know what i mean. i think you should space your lines differently...like:

Like the coward i was,

I stood with the living.

Like the coward i was,

i laid with the dead

...and so on and so forth...

but other than that i love the myterious feeling!! i know my poetry has a lot of that mysteriousness so i say gooo mysteriousness!!!!





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