In Her Eye

September 1, 2011
By Brandywrote PLATINUM, San Jose, California
Brandywrote PLATINUM, San Jose, California
28 articles 10 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
“maybe I can help”

“Ah, yes, you want to be a writer don’t you?”

“You say that as if it’s a bad thing”

“No, no. just a lonely thing. Sometimes the world you create on the page seems more friendly than the lives in the world you actually live in.


And the birds will fly
Paint scattered in the sky
Blood red as I cry
Why?

Canceled, erased, removed
Eternal feeling of a deepening blue.
Beauty in her eye,
Why?

A thousand reasons to give up
Battered rusty pickup truck
Certain shade of sea blue
Falling out of love with you.
Goodbye silly smile
Tear in her eye
Why?

All the lights in the world
Glowing in one beautiful pearl
Love at last growing up
Look how we didn't give up
Words on the page make her move
Dance in her eye
Love in her life.


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on Sep. 10 2011 at 10:49 pm
Brandywrote PLATINUM, San Jose, California
28 articles 10 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
“maybe I can help”

“Ah, yes, you want to be a writer don’t you?”

“You say that as if it’s a bad thing”

“No, no. just a lonely thing. Sometimes the world you create on the page seems more friendly than the lives in the world you actually live in.

thank you so much!!!!

user123 said...
on Sep. 7 2011 at 9:58 pm
This is so fantastic. I love how you describe first love and loss so perfectly (at least that's my interpretation). Keep on writing!

on Sep. 7 2011 at 8:15 pm
becomingalexandria GOLD, Rapid City, South Dakota
11 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
Twas not my lips you kissed but my soul.

Glad to do so n_n your work is very inspiring and i hope you continue to write beautiful poems likle this one :]

on Sep. 7 2011 at 7:54 pm
Brandywrote PLATINUM, San Jose, California
28 articles 10 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
“maybe I can help”

“Ah, yes, you want to be a writer don’t you?”

“You say that as if it’s a bad thing”

“No, no. just a lonely thing. Sometimes the world you create on the page seems more friendly than the lives in the world you actually live in.

thank you so much!!! you're the first person to comment on one of my poems! that really made my day. :)

on Sep. 7 2011 at 10:53 am
becomingalexandria GOLD, Rapid City, South Dakota
11 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
Twas not my lips you kissed but my soul.

Beautiful.




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