My Home...

August 20, 2011
By thelibrarian BRONZE, Longville, Louisiana
thelibrarian BRONZE, Longville, Louisiana
1 article 0 photos 17 comments

Favorite Quote:
men are like steel, if they lose thir temper, they lose thier worth











-chuck norris


Rubble was all around, the walls barely standing
I saw boards and bricks thrown violently across our little patch of land
My home was gone
All my childhood had been spent here
All my memories would fade.
We would rebuild, but it would never be the same as
My home



Similar Articles

JOIN THE DISCUSSION

This article has 1 comment.


on Sep. 7 2011 at 6:40 pm
sunny.all.day. GOLD, Potomac, Maryland
15 articles 0 photos 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you live to be a hundred, I want to live to be a hundred minus one day so I never have to live without you."
— A.A. Milne (Winnie-the-Pooh)
"writing is a struggle against silence" carlos fuentos
You miss 100% of the shots you don't take."

This is pretty good. But for the "all my childhood had been spent here/all my memories would fade." it's kind of like repetition, but since it's only two lines it's kind of... awkward? The phrasing of those two could be a little different :) but I like the idea. Would you mind looking at some of my poems please? :) keep writing!




Swoon Reads

Aspiring Writer? Take Our Online Course!