Note Taking MAG

August 23, 2011
By BeLoveToday PLATINUM, Manchester, New Hampshire
BeLoveToday PLATINUM, Manchester, New Hampshire
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Favorite Quote:
And as we let our own light shine, we unconsciously give other people permission to do the same.
-Nelson Mandela

"Leave your fear of love behind,
let your dreaming be your guide.
If you seek, than you shall find."
-"Dreamer," by Elizaveta


Chemical words bubble out of your mouth
Jumping, leaping, floating free.
I see electronegativity, I hear all eight syllables.
I watch your lips form the perfect shape
To let them slip stealthily through.

Polyatomic ions fill the room, in every corner
Piling up, spinning around my head,
Buzzing and nagging, no; these are acids.
Hydrochloric and hydrofluoric
Spitting their sounds in my ears.
Too many, too fast, I'm suffocating.

I can't understand anymore. The words
Fill my head, packing themselves in,
Phosphate, Car-bon-ate
Storing syllables and extra suffixes;
I'm about to explode, but
Combustion requires a hydrocarbon.
I'll write faster and faster,
Pencil incinerating paper yet
Your words run joyfully in circles,
At the speed of light
Cleverly eluding my memory.



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so_joy SILVER said...
on Oct. 27 2012 at 8:13 pm
so_joy SILVER, Navesink, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"Be the change you want to see."

Great job! I love this! Please read, rate, and comment on my poems! It would mean a lot.

on Dec. 22 2011 at 6:55 pm
ottersarah SILVER, Maryville, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
Everywhere, man blames nature and fate, yet his fate is only the echo of his character and passions, his mistakes and his weaknesses

Wonderful! Your metaphors are superb; enjoy your chemistry class :)

eliana924 GOLD said...
on Dec. 21 2011 at 9:06 pm
eliana924 GOLD, New York, New York
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I love the way you transformed the mundane task of note-taking into a glorious poem, and that you incorporated the chemistry words to enhance the sound of the poem. Keep up the great writing!

on Aug. 29 2011 at 6:33 pm
HeartMindSoul GOLD, Port Aransas, Texas
11 articles 53 photos 27 comments

Excellent.

Perfected mood

 


on Aug. 29 2011 at 6:10 pm
livelovesmile GOLD, Gaithersburg, Maryland
19 articles 0 photos 60 comments

Favorite Quote:
I am like a star burst. A juicy contradiction. I'm hard to figure out, but when you get to my center, your suprised! It's not what you thought it would be, huh.

i really like this poem!

could you please comment or rate mine? 


on Aug. 29 2011 at 4:19 pm
Anonymous_7 SILVER, Branson, Missouri
6 articles 0 photos 119 comments

Favorite Quote:
-The only time you can get away with murder is when writing a book!

Hey, great job. THis is so true! Would you mind checking out and commenting on my poem its called Lost am I. Thanks!

on Aug. 28 2011 at 11:37 pm
BrightBurningCampeador PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
42 articles 11 photos 333 comments

I love it! It's very funny. Sometimes I feel like that.

I like the rhythm. When I frirst read it I was also listening to the Beatles "Magical Mystery Tour". I thought the two went rather well together. :)

Could you maybe read/comment on some of my stuff?





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