August 12, 2011
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Smile like everything is perfect, like your the happiest girl alive. Pretend it's all okay, pretend you don't feel like screaming and crying all day. When they look at you and if everything is okay just nod your head and say yes. Never let your shield waiver, never let them sense the fear and pain that lingers with every breath. You can never let your shield drop until you are all alone in your bed at night; with all your insecurities and fears, then you can finally wollo in your own personal hell.

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CarrieAnn13 said...
Sept. 5, 2011 at 9:15 pm

Okay, I have some criticism.


1.  Generally speaking, even free verse poems are in a stanza format, not in a paragraph.  It’s not always the case, but that’s what readers generally expect.


2.  ‘Your’ should be ‘you’re in the first sentence.


3.  “You can never let your shield drop…”  You need a comma, not a semicolon in this sentence.  You also need... (more »)

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