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Darkest Secret

August 20, 2011
By Hazel-daisy GOLD, --, Other
Hazel-daisy GOLD, --, Other
19 articles 0 photos 324 comments

Favorite Quote:
It takes a lot of courage to show your dreams to someone else - Erna Bombeck

In three words i can sum up everything I've learned in life: it goes on -Robert Frost

Live, Love, Laugh - ______

Hope, Love, breathe <3 - Me


I'm still thinking,
About everything
You left me to deal with,
You dumped your problems
Onto me,
You told me not to tell anyone,
But I couldn't do it,

You told me you darkest secret
But it was too much,
To leave on my
Wimpy shoulders,
I cracked,
I fell,

I had to find a way out,
I hope you understand
I couldn't tell anyone,
Because you told me not to,
I trusted your friendship
And you trusted me,

But you need to know,
I stayed up
Every single night
Crying,
Because of this secret,
Because of your choice
I could've stopped you,
I tried,
But I failed,

And now you are,
Nowhere to be found,
And I know it's my fault,
I just can't help to think,
If you had told me
To talk about it
With somebody else,
Would this all be different?
Would you still be here?
And would I not feel
That it was me,
That it was my fault,
Because you told me,
You told me
Your darkest secret of all


The author's comments:
A very close friend did something and told me, she came to me, nobody else knew...I didn't know how to help her and I cracked under the pressure to save her

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Dudet95 GOLD said...
on Jan. 14 2012 at 10:21 am
Dudet95 GOLD, Ottawa, Kansas
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Favorite Quote:
Your mom, if you don't know the past... You're doomed to repeat it.

-Tear-That's sad:" To be torn apart by a secret not your to tell is imparable, let alone to lose that person because you did not tell someone. Such sadness yet so beautifully written. Amazing job with this poem. Reading through it felt like I was watching a video of someones relationship falling apart at the seems because of one little secret he could not hold in. That's killer and I could not think of any better way to fraze this poem other than Perfect! :) Five stars

on Oct. 16 2011 at 4:47 pm
Hazel-daisy GOLD, --, Other
19 articles 0 photos 324 comments

Favorite Quote:
It takes a lot of courage to show your dreams to someone else - Erna Bombeck

In three words i can sum up everything I've learned in life: it goes on -Robert Frost

Live, Love, Laugh - ______

Hope, Love, breathe <3 - Me

Wow! Thanks so much! :)

on Oct. 16 2011 at 4:46 pm
Hazel-daisy GOLD, --, Other
19 articles 0 photos 324 comments

Favorite Quote:
It takes a lot of courage to show your dreams to someone else - Erna Bombeck

In three words i can sum up everything I've learned in life: it goes on -Robert Frost

Live, Love, Laugh - ______

Hope, Love, breathe <3 - Me

Thanks! :)

TapTap SILVER said...
on Oct. 14 2011 at 5:18 pm
TapTap SILVER, New Berlin, Wisconsin
8 articles 0 photos 146 comments

Favorite Quote:
Dream as if you'll live forever, love like there is no tomorrow, dance like there is no one watching.

This is going on my favorites list! LOVE how you wrote this! great job

on Oct. 8 2011 at 1:36 pm
TheWordSmith SILVER, Placerville, California
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Good job! I've never had to deal with a friend telling me her darkest secret, but I could relate because you described the experience very well.

on Sep. 13 2011 at 3:49 pm
Hazel-daisy GOLD, --, Other
19 articles 0 photos 324 comments

Favorite Quote:
It takes a lot of courage to show your dreams to someone else - Erna Bombeck

In three words i can sum up everything I've learned in life: it goes on -Robert Frost

Live, Love, Laugh - ______

Hope, Love, breathe <3 - Me

thank you :)

Mystiecub said...
on Sep. 4 2011 at 1:46 pm

I agree with ItsAshMal

this is a really good poem; I wouldnt know what this is like, unable to keep in a secret, but it's so realistic and detailed that I could imagine it happening.

really good job :)


on Aug. 31 2011 at 3:18 pm
Hazel-daisy GOLD, --, Other
19 articles 0 photos 324 comments

Favorite Quote:
It takes a lot of courage to show your dreams to someone else - Erna Bombeck

In three words i can sum up everything I've learned in life: it goes on -Robert Frost

Live, Love, Laugh - ______

Hope, Love, breathe <3 - Me

thank you :) and i see what you mean about ''wimpy''!

on Aug. 31 2011 at 9:46 am
ItsAshMal SILVER, Guilford, Connecticut
8 articles 0 photos 44 comments

The rambling nature of this seems to add to the confusion and despair of the author, pulling you in with her (or him?), which I really enjoyed. I love the stanza breaks, too, and all in all think this is a lovely poem.

One thing to watch out for is punctuation, and I also wonder if you could do something with the word "wimpy," which just seems a tad out of place. 


on Aug. 28 2011 at 4:36 pm
Hazel-daisy GOLD, --, Other
19 articles 0 photos 324 comments

Favorite Quote:
It takes a lot of courage to show your dreams to someone else - Erna Bombeck

In three words i can sum up everything I've learned in life: it goes on -Robert Frost

Live, Love, Laugh - ______

Hope, Love, breathe <3 - Me

thank you :)

on Aug. 27 2011 at 11:30 pm
Jessi_suarez1 GOLD, Kissimmee, Florida
16 articles 0 photos 98 comments
hmmm i like that the secret is a mystery. good job !

on Aug. 27 2011 at 5:09 pm
Hazel-daisy GOLD, --, Other
19 articles 0 photos 324 comments

Favorite Quote:
It takes a lot of courage to show your dreams to someone else - Erna Bombeck

In three words i can sum up everything I've learned in life: it goes on -Robert Frost

Live, Love, Laugh - ______

Hope, Love, breathe <3 - Me

thank you :)

Saysh PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 27 2011 at 5:02 pm
Saysh PLATINUM, Brentwood, California
31 articles 1 photo 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Writing is a socially acceptable form of schizophrenia." ~E.L. Doctorow

i loved this! very relatable, i had almost the same thing happen to me in jr. high and it brought back alot of memories. amazing poem :)

on Aug. 25 2011 at 7:43 am
Hazel-daisy GOLD, --, Other
19 articles 0 photos 324 comments

Favorite Quote:
It takes a lot of courage to show your dreams to someone else - Erna Bombeck

In three words i can sum up everything I've learned in life: it goes on -Robert Frost

Live, Love, Laugh - ______

Hope, Love, breathe <3 - Me

thank you! :)

on Aug. 25 2011 at 5:43 am
dancemaniac GOLD, Mansfield, Texas
13 articles 0 photos 20 comments
very emotional...I loved this(: a bit choppy in spots but you make up for it with everything else! great job!!