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Summer

August 14, 2011
By Sarahhhhhhh BRONZE, Malden, Massachusetts
Sarahhhhhhh BRONZE, Malden, Massachusetts
4 articles 0 photos 28 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The silence depressed me. It wasn't the silence of silence. It was my own silence."
- Sylvia Plath, The Bell Jar


with one last bell,
the girls are emancipated, but
still chained to this destitute town.
now they extend their summer arms,
and throw their heads back,
eyes closed and hearts open.


with squinty eyes,
the dazed boys wake and
only half-remember the paths
they traced through town last night
with their summer legs

the swelter is stifling, but
we stumble out into the heat,
swap summer smiles,
and drag our feet on cracked concrete.
as the fog clings to our street.
we zip up our summer skins,

so bittersweet.



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on Aug. 29 2011 at 7:39 pm
DaylightDarkness SILVER, Littleton, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
Everyone's crazy. You know why? We all want to be normal. Well, we cant define normal, and, the people you can point at and say, well isn't he/she normal are rare. Doesnt that kind of defeat the pupose of normal? -My Friend

I like it, I'm not entirely sure what to think.. but thus far I've read it three times and it still holds my attention, so very well done!

on Aug. 29 2011 at 6:51 pm
thetruthawaits94 SILVER, Duncan, Oklahoma
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Favorite Quote:
Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass, but learning to dance in the rain.

I guess the last two lines are my favorite. I like the line zip up our summer skins.

on Aug. 29 2011 at 6:51 pm
thetruthawaits94 SILVER, Duncan, Oklahoma
9 articles 0 photos 353 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass, but learning to dance in the rain.

This is lovely. I absolutely love the last line! i love the words you choose to use in your poems. SO unique and interesting! Wonderful job. I can really see life through your eyes. Talent! :) i wish stuff like this made it into the magazine! Not all teenagers like to write about drugs, love, and wanting freedom, or whatever. If the magazine wasn't eespecially looking for that kind of stuff. I AM SURE that the poems i have read of your, especially church and summer, will have made it! :)

on Aug. 29 2011 at 10:55 am
yellowflower SILVER, Basking Ridge, New Jersey
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I love the words you use in your poems and the rhythm that they create the alliteration  of s throughout the whole poem ties it together so well! I also love the topic and reading it makes me feel like summer is just starting rather than just ending- i wish!! :)

on Aug. 29 2011 at 10:51 am
ohheyyyelli SILVER, Woonsocket, Rhode Island
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Whoa, why is my text like doubled lol? Sorry about that

on Aug. 29 2011 at 10:50 am
ohheyyyelli SILVER, Woonsocket, Rhode Island
5 articles 3 photos 178 comments

Had to reread this one as well to get the flow (maybe it's just because I'm watching a lifetime movie at the same time...lol..). I really loved the lines "now they extend their summer amrs, and throw their heads back"  "they traced through town last night with their summer legs" "we zip up our summer skins". But I think maybe you should change the line "swap summer smiles", I like the repetition of the word summer, but I don't like it in that lin. Try using a summer-y adjective, i dont know? Like "swap sun-kissed smiles" or something.

Overall, I really love this poem, it seems as though this should have more comments, I may even add it to my favorites!


on Aug. 29 2011 at 2:39 am
Garnet77 PLATINUM, Sinagpore, Other
31 articles 6 photos 578 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everything's a triangle." ~ My mother

"Write what you love, write what you care about, because sometimes, it's the easiest way to be heard."

Beautiful! I could imagine everything going on in this. Excellent work! :)

julian GOLD said...
on Aug. 29 2011 at 12:43 am
julian GOLD, Eugene, Oregon
17 articles 17 photos 223 comments

Favorite Quote:
The goal is not about living forever, the goal is about creating something that can.

Wow, this poem was beautifully written , and it had a distinct and steady flow, which made reading it even more entertaining. This wasn't one of those "summer sunshine" poems that are extremely cliched, this one was unique and original and I am surprised that I am the only one who has commented on your piece so far! It certainly deserves more attention, and I sincerely think it should be published. Great job with this one, you just earned 5 stars!


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