Don't Say, "I Love You"

August 17, 2011
By Raytheraym PLATINUM, Belton, Missouri
Raytheraym PLATINUM, Belton, Missouri
47 articles 35 photos 460 comments

Give me something real,
that I can see, hear, and feel.

Don't give me something fake,
like your smile, laughter, and high stakes.

Tell me the truth;
don't say, "I love you."


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on Sep. 14 2011 at 4:13 pm
Raytheraym PLATINUM, Belton, Missouri
47 articles 35 photos 460 comments
Thank you!

on Aug. 22 2011 at 4:16 pm
Free_One PLATINUM, ????, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"I am not invincible or unstoppable, but I stay strong because it is the only way to survive in this world."

Very good! This could get published! Great job!!! :)(:

on Aug. 20 2011 at 10:44 am
Raytheraym PLATINUM, Belton, Missouri
47 articles 35 photos 460 comments
Thanks! :)

on Aug. 20 2011 at 12:27 am
Jessi_suarez1 GOLD, Kissimmee, Florida
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omg ! exacally how i feel !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! haha good job! :)

on Aug. 19 2011 at 8:36 pm
Raytheraym PLATINUM, Belton, Missouri
47 articles 35 photos 460 comments
Thanks! :)

on Aug. 19 2011 at 7:03 pm
Hazel-daisy GOLD, --, Other
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Favorite Quote:
It takes a lot of courage to show your dreams to someone else - Erna Bombeck

In three words i can sum up everything I've learned in life: it goes on -Robert Frost

Live, Love, Laugh - ______

Hope, Love, breathe <3 - Me

i really like it but i do think you could've made it a bit longer! besides i think its good!

on Aug. 19 2011 at 3:46 pm
Raytheraym PLATINUM, Belton, Missouri
47 articles 35 photos 460 comments
Thank you both!

on Aug. 19 2011 at 3:15 pm
Brandywrote PLATINUM, San Jose, California
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Favorite Quote:
“maybe I can help”

“Ah, yes, you want to be a writer don’t you?”

“You say that as if it’s a bad thing”

“No, no. just a lonely thing. Sometimes the world you create on the page seems more friendly than the lives in the world you actually live in.

i like the "high stakes" part, it sounds like lady gaga bad romance kind of thing, this would be a really good beginng to a song =D can you check out my "Leaving the Forest" or "Sweet Angel"??

 


on Aug. 18 2011 at 8:43 pm
BetweenWorks SILVER, Charlotte, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
The meaning of life is a question that you have already answered.

it has a real nice flow. i would suggest expanding the idea a bit more, but it was still good.


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