Don't Say, "I Love You"

Give me something real,
that I can see, hear, and feel.

Don't give me something fake,
like your smile, laughter, and high stakes.

Tell me the truth;
don't say, "I love you."

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writerfreak21231 said...
Aug. 22, 2011 at 4:16 pm
Very good! This could get published! Great job!!! :)(:
Raytheraym replied...
Sept. 14, 2011 at 4:13 pm
Thank you!
dark_armor1This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Aug. 20, 2011 at 12:27 am
omg ! exacally how i feel !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! haha good job! :)
Raytheraym replied...
Aug. 20, 2011 at 10:44 am
Thanks! :)
Hazel-daisy This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 19, 2011 at 7:03 pm
i really like it but i do think you could've made it a bit longer! besides i think its good!
Raytheraym replied...
Aug. 19, 2011 at 8:36 pm
Thanks! :)
MagicMan2011 said...
Aug. 18, 2011 at 8:43 pm
it has a real nice flow. i would suggest expanding the idea a bit more, but it was still good.
Brandywrote replied...
Aug. 19, 2011 at 3:15 pm

i like the "high stakes" part, it sounds like lady gaga bad romance kind of thing, this would be a really good beginng to a song =D can you check out my "Leaving the Forest" or "Sweet Angel"??


Raytheraym replied...
Aug. 19, 2011 at 3:46 pm
Thank you both!
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