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Mistakenly thinking of you

August 16, 2011
By Bambi67 SILVER, Chicago, Illinois
Bambi67 SILVER, Chicago, Illinois
9 articles 1 photo 58 comments

Favorite Quote:
remember that the future comes one day at a time.
Dean Acheson


I don’t like summer but I love the sun, I don’t like the winter but I had fun in the snow, hate rainy days but enjoy the feeling of the water rubbing on my face, hate walking but love the wind which often takes my sadness and thoughts away. Normally hate change and don’t like surprises but love the autumn season. I am a puzzle with symptoms of bipolar, simple and selfish, peaceful and rebellious. Ungrateful, never complete, dreamy, lazy, boring and after all just... Human. I have never found true friends rather loneliness is my friend. I have never loved but instead fantasy. I hate when people criticize me but I don’t watch my words when I do criticize. I believe in mermaids, aliens, witches or maybe not. I hate the fat but I love to eat. Don’t tolerate my mother but would give my life for her. I don’t like people but cannot live without them. Having been yet in love or rather I try to think so, had already taste the feeling of a broken heart, 24 hours a day feeling lonely with so many people around. I'm not bipolar... I am the person who things you, feels, hears you and loves you. I am your disease and your my medicine, I don’t like you but yet miss you, I have no sense nor reason but on the edge of insanity hoping you will save me. Understandably I'm crazy about you.



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on Jan. 7 2012 at 9:48 am
MollyDoubleU BRONZE, Minooka, Illinois
3 articles 5 photos 45 comments

Favorite Quote:
"So we beat on, boats against the current, borne back ceaselessly into the past." - The Great Gatsby

Instead of one big chunk, separate this into different stanzas. You also have a few spelling and grammatical mistakes. But I think you have a very solid idea here. Keep it up :)

Bambi67 SILVER said...
on Nov. 14 2011 at 9:13 am
Bambi67 SILVER, Chicago, Illinois
9 articles 1 photo 58 comments

Favorite Quote:
remember that the future comes one day at a time.
Dean Acheson

Thank you very much:-)

on Nov. 13 2011 at 10:33 pm
HeatherBee BRONZE, I Live In, Texas
1 article 0 photos 1979 comments

Favorite Quote:
Go on and try to tear me down. I will be rising from the ground, like a skyscraper

Love is louder than the pressure to be perfect

totally loved the beginning!!!!! nice job

Bambi67 SILVER said...
on Aug. 28 2011 at 4:40 pm
Bambi67 SILVER, Chicago, Illinois
9 articles 1 photo 58 comments

Favorite Quote:
remember that the future comes one day at a time.
Dean Acheson

Thank you very much,I'll keep that in mind:-)

on Aug. 28 2011 at 4:18 pm
ohheyyyelli SILVER, Woonsocket, Rhode Island
5 articles 3 photos 178 comments
Very nice voice/style, however you should have it in a different form, instead of all one chunk, make lines, you know? Otherwise, good poem!

Bambi67 SILVER said...
on Aug. 24 2011 at 9:25 am
Bambi67 SILVER, Chicago, Illinois
9 articles 1 photo 58 comments

Favorite Quote:
remember that the future comes one day at a time.
Dean Acheson

Thank very much...will you detailed the errors please that way I won't make them again for the article I am writing..thank you

on Aug. 23 2011 at 11:45 pm
divingforreality GOLD, Fontana, California
10 articles 7 photos 18 comments

I agree with moraleash.

Also, some parts were a bit confusing.

Although, I can see your general concept.


Bambi67 SILVER said...
on Aug. 23 2011 at 7:37 pm
Bambi67 SILVER, Chicago, Illinois
9 articles 1 photo 58 comments

Favorite Quote:
remember that the future comes one day at a time.
Dean Acheson

Thank you! =)

on Aug. 23 2011 at 7:35 pm
PhoenixCrossing GOLD, Tinley Park, Illinois
14 articles 0 photos 178 comments
This is interesting writing because it is very relatable. Writing tips? Condense  it so it's easier on the eye. Also there are a couple mistakes. Overall, I like it. 

Bambi67 SILVER said...
on Aug. 17 2011 at 7:21 pm
Bambi67 SILVER, Chicago, Illinois
9 articles 1 photo 58 comments

Favorite Quote:
remember that the future comes one day at a time.
Dean Acheson

Thank you and I will..:-)

on Aug. 17 2011 at 7:16 pm
ekaterinahansing, San Antonio, Texas
0 articles 0 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
Being bored is a choice. Choose not to.

Wow. This is SO how I feel some days. Kind of clicked for me. Thanks.

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