Time...

August 10, 2011
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The stream, it flows,
Heedlessly of where it goes
The fly buzzes ‘round and round,
Reason simply cannot be found

within its motions
And so we beg the minute hand,
To move faster, and
When the clock strikes two,
The lost hour I rue

I said I wanted to be big and tall
Yet now, clutching at my toys, my picture books,
As they give, and I fall
Faster, faster, faster, seconds, minutes, days, and weeks
Caught in the moment, in the simple task
Each closes their eyes and pretends not
To notice the air rushing by, and
The fly circling ‘round, and
The stream trickling still, and
Then eyes flash open
Now milky, the sparkle gone
Hair white, skin wrinkled
Squint nearsightedly, at the distant places
Seen so clearly, it seems, not a day before; and now
To sigh, to wonder, and to cry
“Where is that time?”





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yazigirl said...
Mar. 13, 2012 at 4:47 pm
it was good, and i think its something we can all compare to- time passing and finding youself in an empty room, the only thing there, your memories. very good!
 
Blue4indigo replied...
Mar. 13, 2012 at 4:54 pm
Thanks for taking the time to read!
 
Kenniekonglee said...
Aug. 26, 2011 at 10:52 pm
haha~ it was part funny!! likes it~~ 5/5 for this!! >v<
 
Blue4 replied...
Aug. 28, 2011 at 1:22 pm
Thank you.
 
DNaes said...
Aug. 20, 2011 at 11:28 am
i love all your work there alll great cant wait to read what your going to post next
 
Blue4 replied...
Aug. 21, 2011 at 5:49 pm
Thank you very much! ("secrets" is the latest piece I had posted, did you read it?)
 
DNaes replied...
Aug. 31, 2011 at 10:48 pm
yes i have read it and it was great as welllll
 
TotheSea said...
Aug. 16, 2011 at 12:35 pm
Woah!  The title is just the opposite of my poem, which is called "...Time"!  Anyways, I really liked yours!  Your style wasn't as modern, I thought, with the "'rounds" and things like that.  I really liked it, how sometimes it rhymed and sometimes not, and also the descriptions and the line breaks when you left the "and" on the first line and continued on the next.  It was just great!
 
Blue4 replied...
Aug. 16, 2011 at 12:48 pm
That's funny, now I want to look at your poem:) Thank you, I'm glad you like it, and honestly, I'm pretty old fashioned too, so I guess it's natural for my poem to reflect that.
 
Cissypercflute said...
Aug. 15, 2011 at 9:14 pm
This is beautiful .... I love the descriptions .... Marvellous job.
PS: I'll be waiting for your next teen Ink submission.
Lovely Job.
 
Blue4 replied...
Aug. 16, 2011 at 7:30 am
Thank you! I just wrote another poem yesterday, and I'll probably submit it today.
 
Kbuschan said...
Aug. 15, 2011 at 1:08 pm

i like the feeling of feeling rushed that you have going throughout the poem and i think you added just the right amount of descriptions as so not to steer away from the original idead. the only thing is that in the first stanza last line reasons simply cannot be found

within its motions, it should be part of the same stanza so that it flows better. but good job overall :)

 
Blue4 replied...
Aug. 15, 2011 at 2:25 pm
Thank you, actually, the line "within its motions" was goofed up by Teen Ink, I intended it to be only indented, but for some reason, they made it a new stanza
 
WithPenAndScript said...
Aug. 14, 2011 at 10:03 pm
:) Very good 
 
Blue4 replied...
Aug. 15, 2011 at 8:51 am
Thank you.
 
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