August 6, 2011
Isn't it funny
that what I do,
(making paper pretty)
infuriates you?
You look at me
call me ugly--
cut right to the chase:
that's my jugular's misplaced

Isn't it enough
for you to know,
my own self-worth
will never grow?
Because of words--
ingrained in my head
that others have said
(and you've hammered home)
with that horrible tone!
Through your constant “improve this”,
I'm still a near miss.

When will it end?
Once I'm finally dead?
Or will Heaven not play
music loud enough

When will you leave?
When you “know”
that I am perfect
(or when I'm wrecked)?
Tell me now,
I need to know:
should I run...
or simply go?

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WrittenEmotions said...
Jan. 16, 2012 at 6:25 pm
This is really nice, great job!(: 4/5
Lexie96 said...
Oct. 24, 2011 at 6:46 am
Really good and I'm glad you got out of this. This is a great piece, think you could spare some time and leave me some feedback on mine?
ryanthebrat said...
Aug. 24, 2011 at 12:41 am
Its simply good..no not the word I'm looking for how about GREAT.it shows your creativity and what happens in most relationships.oh I loved how you put. TO DROWN YOU OUT.because to me it shows good emotions.
MoraleAsh said...
Aug. 21, 2011 at 9:48 pm
I really liked this! I loved the format and how the questions already had answers. It was creative!
Hazel-daisy This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 19, 2011 at 8:35 pm
i actually loved this! the last verse was my favoruite, it was really emotional, really well written aswel! :)
WishfulDoer said...
Aug. 17, 2011 at 5:23 pm
This poem seriously hits home for me, and I love it. I think using caps for "To drown you out" was really awesome. I like it a lot. c:
MagicMan2011 replied...
Aug. 18, 2011 at 5:11 pm

Wow this is great ive felt like that befor. beutiful work, good job!


Kev-Girl said...
Aug. 16, 2011 at 3:38 pm
good job! i realy liked this!        
megsloveslions said...
Aug. 16, 2011 at 1:28 pm
I really liked it, the message, and how it rhymed in certain places
msn9896 said...
Aug. 16, 2011 at 12:47 pm
I really liked it, the meaning was something I could relate to :)
cheryl0424 said...
Aug. 15, 2011 at 6:02 am
I like the message and the movement of this piece. Well done.
merelyacitizen This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 14, 2011 at 10:48 pm
I enjoyed this one! I was able to relate to it very well. Also, nice rhyme scheme in certain places.
WithPenAndScript said...
Aug. 14, 2011 at 9:56 pm
Very, VERY nice. I enjoyed this
Regs_the_Shorty said...
Aug. 14, 2011 at 7:36 pm
JoPepper said...
Aug. 14, 2011 at 3:28 pm
This is very good ,good job keep writing!!!!! :D
FreedomIsMyVirtue said...
Aug. 14, 2011 at 12:09 am
I'm not quite sure about your use of dash and parenthesis. I think they're a little off. Other than that, this poem is good. :">
hworld123 replied...
Aug. 17, 2011 at 5:08 pm
I partially agree with you here... I think that the use of parentheses is a cool touch; however the second use of a dash does seem a bit random and disrupts the flow of the piece. Author, your use of capitals at the end was effective.
Zildj This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 12, 2011 at 8:04 pm
holy cow this is great. 
JerseyGirl716 replied...
Aug. 13, 2011 at 1:39 pm
Thank you SO much! That just made my day :)
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