Mermaid This work is considered exceptional by our editorial staff.

August 8, 2011
Thrown into the sea as a young girl,
from the dolphins she learned to swim
And the fish lent her gills,
so she could breathe and dream among them under the sea
Others gave her scales to cover herself, so she would fit in
And over time, from never walking, her legs were woven together by the many multicolored scales given to her
Her hair grew long and nearly colorless,
She hadn't seen the sun in so long...
One day, curiosity got the best of her
and she went up to the surface
Singing a whale song in her lovely soprano range, she looked up to the sky in wonder
Almost in a trance, she stayed there for hours
Gazing, dreaming, wondering, and wishing of a life above the waves
Until a ship came, parts gilded in gold
Crewmen aboard saw her and waved their hats in the air
They were screaming something she couldn't quite understand
But it sounded like

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InkWriter13 said...
Jun. 22, 2012 at 12:59 am
Certainly intruiging. I like how you begin. A completely different take on mermaids. Good ending. Has a whimsical air that works well with this piece. Seems a little abrupt from transitioning from she hadn't seen the sun in so long to one day, curiousity... But other than, I love the concept. Very unique and insightful. Loved it. 5 stars.
The~crayon~in~my~heart said...
Sept. 8, 2011 at 10:04 am
wow this is really beautiful. i love the imagery and the feeling, but it also has the feeling of a fairytale. nice work!
inkblot13 replied...
Jun. 21, 2012 at 11:29 am
Thanks! :D
Regs_the_Shorty said...
Aug. 12, 2011 at 1:53 pm
Really good I liked the way you wrote it very detailed
inkblot13 replied...
Jun. 21, 2012 at 11:30 am
Thank you!
BriarRose This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 12, 2011 at 1:02 pm

this is pretty! you did a wonderful job of painting a picture with your words.  And the ending was excellent.



inkblot13 replied...
Jun. 21, 2012 at 11:31 am
Thank you so much! (And wow, my thanks is way overdue! lol)
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