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When I saw you on picture
Down my spine, lots of shivers!
Three, two, one...Bomb about to explode!
Detonate, find out the code
Reasons unable to find
But cease to colonize my mind
Out of my mental asylum
Find yourself another room
Punish me not with your smiles
I'll walk away a thousand miles
Touch not my little hands
I'll bury myself deep in the sand
Never look in my eyes
'Cause you freeze me into an ice
Stop telling, "You are pretty"
Stop this insane flattery
'Cause You do drive me crazy
Making my world topsy-turvy
Oh, indecipherable infatuations
Not love, no propositions
One may say, "A deja vu!"
But all knows it—me and you.




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TheElement said...
today at 10:51 am:
I like it! 
 
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Shadowing.the.Moon said...
today at 10:51 am:
I like the poem but it seems choppy like you left some words out  But not bad keep it up
 
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LiraDaerisThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
May 4 at 3:44 am:
I really like some of the lines you have in here, but the are some rhythm snags in it. I'd also recommend placing spaces between the couplets or between pairs of couplets. I really enjoyed the idea of this poem. Good job on this one!
 
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vaidaspade10This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Feb. 24 at 5:15 pm:
Really like this one. :) I plan on reading more soon. :)  
 
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Silver2blackThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jan. 25, 2012 at 4:51 am:
I like the poem, but didn't understand the ending, "colonize my mind" I love that line, your poem always have a favorite line that lights of the poem.
 
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