A Killer

July 31, 2011
By BloodyMary PLATINUM, N/A, Other
BloodyMary PLATINUM, N/A, Other
22 articles 8 photos 70 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is like a box of chocolates; You never know what you are gonna get.


When I saw you on picture
Down my spine, lots of shivers!
Three, two, one...Bomb about to explode!
Detonate, find out the code
Reasons unable to find
But cease to colonize my mind
Out of my mental asylum
Find yourself another room
Punish me not with your smiles
I'll walk away a thousand miles
Touch not my little hands
I'll bury myself deep in the sand
Never look in my eyes
'Cause you freeze me into an ice
Stop telling, "You are pretty"
Stop this insane flattery
'Cause You do drive me crazy
Making my world topsy-turvy
Oh, indecipherable infatuations
Not love, no propositions
One may say, "A deja vu!"
But all knows it—me and you.



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TheUniverse said...
on Jul. 19 2013 at 10:51 am
TheUniverse, Everywhere,, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Exercise to stimulate, not to annihilate. The world wasn't formed in a day, and neither were we. Set small goals and build upon them.

I like it! 

on Jul. 19 2013 at 10:51 am
Shadowing.the.Moon BRONZE, Dickinson, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Try not to become a man of success, but rather try to become a man of value."
~Albert Einstein

I like the poem but it seems choppy like you left some words out  But not bad keep it up

on May. 4 2013 at 3:44 am
LiraDaeris PLATINUM, Tucson, Arizona
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Favorite Quote:
“You have brains in your head. You have feet in your shoes. You can steer yourself any direction you choose. You're on your own. And you know what you know. And YOU are the one who'll decide where to go...”
― Dr. Seuss, Oh, the Places You'll Go!

I really like some of the lines you have in here, but the are some rhythm snags in it. I'd also recommend placing spaces between the couplets or between pairs of couplets. I really enjoyed the idea of this poem. Good job on this one!

on Feb. 24 2013 at 5:15 pm
vaidaspade10 BRONZE, Davenport, Washington
4 articles 0 photos 22 comments

Favorite Quote:
"No matter what they say behind your back, they're at a loss because you've locked the knife drawer. Forgiving them now will just leave your back sore." -Qiana Casch

Really like this one. :) I plan on reading more soon. :)  

.king. SILVER said...
on Jan. 25 2012 at 4:51 am
.king. SILVER, Yeux Bien Tres Bien, Other
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Favorite Quote:
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I like the poem, but didn't understand the ending, "colonize my mind" I love that line, your poem always have a favorite line that lights of the poem.


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