The Violinist

August 3, 2011
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A wizened man, an old, old man
His gait is slow, yet walks as best he can
The train turns, the floor unstable,
Yet he stands, as if to tell a fable
He lifts a violin, an áged instrument like he,
He lifts his chin, as if to let us see,
His unshaved face, his parchment skin, and wrinkled clothes,
Then with a start begins to play,
Telling with his melodies more than words can say
The tone is light, yet missing a slight harmony,
For there is no mindless joy in his melody
His two songs suit him, like his violin,
Both pleasant to the ear, but out, no longer in
He stops, he played too long, but not enough,
And reaches for something with his right hand rough
A cup, which he holds out and walks the train car ‘round
How could this be, to myself I sob,
Did someone, him of his small fortune rob?
This is not right, I think, and do the least I can
I follow him, and drop some coins into the cup for the man
He looks at me, and whispers, “merci”
No family who his destitution see?
He shuffles back, more ringing of the coins
It seems to me a slightly cheering noise,
For maybe he will have a hearty meal,
Or another check for his rent seal
Still, this is not right, I know
As the train stops and he moves to go
He should be reading in a rocking chair, or sleeping
Surrounded by his offspring, and never seeking,
Spare change, and giving, his soul to those who hardly care
Did he live his youth and pay his fare,
To in old age, deprived of stability and rest
Be forced to live on love and mercy, so rare, thus, and, the best





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svds1 said...
Feb. 24, 2012 at 3:43 pm
It's a very pretty verse narrative!! Was this in the print magazine?
 
Blue4indigo replied...
Feb. 25, 2012 at 9:52 am
Thank you! And no, the work that gets published in the magazine has a little "mag" icon next to it. But i wish...
 
Zinaidia said...
Jan. 7, 2012 at 5:31 pm
Wow, this is amazing! It isnt too short or too long and you tell the story amazingly. Bravo!
 
Blue4indigo replied...
Feb. 25, 2012 at 9:47 am
Thank you very much!
 
freedomfighter97 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 31, 2011 at 9:41 am
Beautiful job!  Thank you for capturing your experience with these thoughtful words so we may ponder more upon how we may influence others and bring hope to their injustice.
 
Blue4 replied...
Aug. 31, 2011 at 5:34 pm
Thanks, and you're welcome; I really tried.
 
Dude123 said...
Aug. 30, 2011 at 2:44 pm
fantastic.  my favorite part was the way his joyless music parallels his disenchanted life
 
Blue4 replied...
Aug. 31, 2011 at 5:33 pm
Thank you.
 
Kenniekonglee said...
Aug. 26, 2011 at 11:12 pm
i was left speechless , TOUCHED !!
 
Blue4 replied...
Aug. 27, 2011 at 11:58 am
Thank you.
 
Harebelle This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 17, 2011 at 12:26 pm
I read this poem a few days ago and didn't know what to say, and now I'm reading it again because it's so beautiful and sad. Thank you!
 
Blue4 replied...
Aug. 17, 2011 at 3:04 pm
Thank YOU. For letting me know that I've written something that can make a person feel like that.
 
ekent2013 said...
Aug. 16, 2011 at 1:44 pm
I really like this poem.  You make it so the reader can really "see" what's happening.  It really is good.
 
Blue4 replied...
Aug. 16, 2011 at 1:50 pm
Thank you very much. My new poem, "Secrets" is posted!
 
Cissypercflute said...
Aug. 15, 2011 at 9:03 pm
This absolutely marvellous, It is really moving. While reciting your poem, It seemed like the words were coming alive. I felt like I was right there, at that moment.
PS: This is definetely, Poetry Out Lod material. 
Lovely Job.
 
Blue4 replied...
Aug. 16, 2011 at 7:32 am
Thank you, thank you!
 
WithPenAndScript said...
Aug. 14, 2011 at 10:01 pm
This was so sad...so good....but...so so sad :( Keep it up!!
 
Blue4 replied...
Aug. 15, 2011 at 9:38 am
Thank you.
 
Sophie Rose C. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 14, 2011 at 3:50 am

The beginning was very moving, the detail entrancing.

Often when writing with a ryhme scheme, the words in the poem are chosen exclusively BECAUSE they ryhme. You managed to steer away from this mostly, though. I really like your poem!!

could you maybe look at my 'dream poem' ??

 
Blue4 replied...
Aug. 14, 2011 at 8:46 am
thank you, I tried to chose words that actually explained my point. And sure, I'll read your poem.
 
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