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Where are you, Debbie?

Where are you, Debbie?
Do you exist in the world?
Or somewhere so unknown,
You shall never again be heard?
Do you wander with strangers,
Or sit with neighbors?
Is it truly a lovely place
To be?

Where are you, Mother,
The one we remember so well?
Who comforts us in the night,
With a laugh like ringing bells?
Who watched soccer games a many,
And provided us with plenty?
Is it truly a lovely place
To be?

Where are you, Wife,
The one he desired the most?
Do you still kiss him goodnight,
Or still prepare his breakfast toast?
The couple that would never separate,
The one he called his soulmate?
Is it truly a lovely place
To be?

Where are you, Sister,
Who shared laughs and a smile,
With a brother who would never leave her,
Even for just a while?
The siblings that would endure any day
The hardships that may come their way?
Is it truly a lovely place
To be?

Where are you, Daughter,
Whom they adored and took pride in?
And smiled and gestured,
When you would stride in?
The one who could never be more good
For the parents who knew she would?
Is it truly a lovely place
To be?

Where are you, Aunt,
The one I write this to?
That we would travel miles away
Just so we could see you?
Do you dwell in my mind
Just to remind
Me of the times
I'm missing today?
Where are you, Debbie?

Is it truly a lovely place
To be?



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LovelyBlueRose said...
Aug. 14, 2011 at 6:49 am
Sweet free-verse! I love it how it really describes. Keep writing! :)
 
renthead96 replied...
Aug. 14, 2011 at 10:01 am
Thanks you!
 
renthead96 replied...
Aug. 14, 2011 at 8:46 pm
Whoops, I mean thank you :P
 
IreneEYtonKratzThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 10, 2011 at 12:10 am
Especially love the end
 
renthead96 replied...
Aug. 10, 2011 at 12:03 pm
Thank you :)
 
MidnightFireThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Aug. 9, 2011 at 8:40 pm
Really good, I liked it :) good job
 
renthead96 replied...
Aug. 9, 2011 at 10:08 pm
Thank you :)
 
StrangeJade This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 9, 2011 at 8:20 pm
This is so well-written; emotional but not sappy; haunting but not overly angst-ridden. In other words, perfect! :) Hoping to read more from you in future.
 
renthead96 replied...
Aug. 9, 2011 at 10:08 pm
Thanks! :)
 
Garnet77 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 9, 2011 at 10:22 am
Wow. I love your unique style and the emotion you instill in this piece. This is just so beautiful :)
 
renthead96 replied...
Aug. 9, 2011 at 2:16 pm
Thanks so much :)
 
M.Trainor said...
Aug. 9, 2011 at 9:04 am
I don't normally like poems, but I loved this. It's so real. I'm sorry you lost your aunt.
 
renthead96 replied...
Aug. 9, 2011 at 9:40 am
Thank you for reading :)
 
AspiringWriter said...
Aug. 8, 2011 at 12:21 pm

Wow! This is a very heart-touching poem. I really enjoyed it, and all the emotions seemed pretty vivid and clear. I'm so sorry about your aunt.

 

Great work. Keep writing! :)

 
renthead96 replied...
Aug. 8, 2011 at 2:53 pm
Thank you so much!
 
tealbird said...
Aug. 8, 2011 at 11:47 am

This is beautiful, and I kind of connected with it--I've seen people lose their life to cancer. I'm sorry for your loss.

 

Again, amazing work!

 
renthead96 replied...
Aug. 8, 2011 at 11:57 am
Thank you for reading :)
 
.Izzy.This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Aug. 8, 2011 at 10:08 am
This is so touching! I loved the repetition, especially at the ending! It's beautiful(:
 
renthead96 replied...
Aug. 8, 2011 at 11:57 am
Thank you so much!
 
CoffeeKat said...
Aug. 7, 2011 at 10:22 pm

*sniff* Wow. A very beautiful and touching poem. I can relate--I have a very sick Aunt who is my Godmother as well, and I fear she won't be with us for much longer. Reading something like this reminds of the life they left behind and makes you wonder about where they go next, yeah? Hits close to home--those are the best kinds of poems. =`) Cheers.

~CK

 
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