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Every time I walk into the store
It always seems like pets galore
Dogs are here and cats are there
Lizards and parrots are everywhere

As I walk along the aisles I see
Many fish that swim before me
I walk to the counter to a water filled dish
And there I see a blue beta fish

That beta fish is a lonely soul
Swimming alone in that small, empty bowl
Its blue shiny tail flipping about
Soggy fish flakes tickling its snout

Then suddenly that beta fish is I
I have to leave now, I say goodbye
The love I have grown for that simple being
Has given my life a whole new meaning



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Love.Hate.Passion. said...
Aug. 5, 2011 at 10:08 pm:
I like the poem. It's cutesy and rhymey, but the last couple of stanza's left me confused. I think that you could have made a much longer poem out of it. Keep it up , you did a great job!
 
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thetruthawaits94 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 5, 2011 at 7:53 pm:
I don't understand the first line of the last stanza. Also, i feel that the poem ends too quickly that there is more that you want to say here. Why has it given your life a whole new meaning? You may expand on that if you wanted. This is a very cute poem and it flowed like water from a faucet! :)
 
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Kbuschan said...
Aug. 5, 2011 at 6:53 pm:
haha its very cute and i hope it doesnt sound insulting but it reminds me of a childs story. ya know? anywhoo i like it! good job
 
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