A Gift

July 24, 2011
We have received
A gift
It is a gift of
True beauty
It is a gift we
Have yet to receive
To it's full
It is a gift that
We truly do not deserve
It is a God given
Our world was given
The gift of

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snaomi This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 24, 2011 at 10:08 pm
I agree with the sentiment of the poem and like the idea that we haven't yet received the gift to its fullest extent.  I do think, though, that the exclamation points at the end are a little unnecessary and take away some of the impact of the poem
musicispassion replied...
Aug. 25, 2011 at 10:15 pm
thanks i agree now that it's posted the exclamation points aren't very prfessional sorry
BreeTayler This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 16, 2011 at 7:57 pm
I loved it. Music really does make the world go round. Lol ... Well, that and love and money and God, of course haha... Your style is very unique.. Original. It's inspiring:)
musicispassion replied...
Aug. 16, 2011 at 8:03 pm
aw, thanks that means alot
Ha-5-rika said...
Aug. 6, 2011 at 10:42 am
You are an amazing short poem writer yourself. I love this poem because it speaks of music. I love music.
musicispassion replied...
Aug. 6, 2011 at 2:26 pm
thanks i love music
white_chocolate97 said...
Aug. 2, 2011 at 1:19 am
Great job. I like the way you broke up the lines.
musicispassion replied...
Aug. 2, 2011 at 3:25 pm
thans !! :P
CarrieAnn13 said...
Aug. 1, 2011 at 3:00 pm

Another great poem!  My only criticism is the ending line.  "Music!!" should only have one exclamation point.

Other than that, great job!

musicispassion replied...
Aug. 1, 2011 at 3:06 pm
thanks and sorry
Batmans_other_lover replied...
Aug. 9, 2011 at 12:47 pm
love it and lovve music its my happy placee ahha
musicispassion replied...
Aug. 9, 2011 at 1:48 pm
same here luv ya :P !!
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